|Reviews for Unforeseen Consequences|
| amimai002 chapter 23 . 1/16
Awsome story! While dead and left on a bit of a cliffhanger, it's one of the best I ever read.
| KuletXCore chapter 5 . 11/26/2016
I can call Louise "Patient Zero" or "Magical Girl Zero" because she was one of the first magical girls of Halkengenia, and will later on become the first witch.
Please update, it has been years since the last one. Thanks!
| The Keeper of Worlds chapter 23 . 10/11/2016
Poor Kirche. Things getting crazy, but couldn't a girl wish Saito into one and THEN he makes a wish?
| meme sphere chapter 23 . 10/10/2016
great googly moogly it's all gone t and last updated 2 years ago :(
| Fimbu1vetr chapter 23 . 10/10/2016
Sayaka noooo! O shi, didn't expect to see Mr. Elf again so soon. And really didn't expect Kirche to go witch heh.
| HUE chapter 22 . 10/10/2016
NOOOOO. So gim turn to grif sid, MUST BE WAY BACK
| Hue chapter 20 . 10/10/2016
| Hue chapter 19 . 10/10/2016
Hope you continue this. This is quite a exciting crossover!
| Fimbulvetr chapter 13 . 10/10/2016
O shit I thought this fic was dead. Good stuff!
| Ibskib chapter 12 . 9/18/2016
HoW bAd - How bad
was not reviled - did not revile him
casted - cast
was reviled - was revolted
its tailed - its tail
I go am - I am
The little dud - The little dude
| Ibskib chapter 8 . 9/17/2016
seems like proofreading was less than diligent, especially in this chapter, aside from typos and homophones, you really have a problem with leaving out words, such as articles, creating incomplete sentences.
I would strongly suggest getting a beta:
herself loathing - her self-loathing
andhadn't - and hadn't
oruse - or use
have bath - have a bath
imagine of - imagine if
the slat - the slit (the meaning of 'slat' is subtly different)
and airtight - an airtight
Rin? (not sure what that's supposed to mean)
thought himself leader - thought himself a leader
within the villagers - with the villagers
a mantel - a mantle
in surprise attack - in a surprise attack
fired - fire (two instances)
- me. Louise
roared defiance - roared in defiance
dismissed thoughts - dismissed her thoughts
He parried off - she parried/she warded off
possibilities human bullets - possible human bullets
waspromised - was promised
Wardes you turn - Wardes you turned
to her previous - to her previous ones
reigns - reins
do think - do you think
perused - pursued
the mast beam - the mast crossbeam
With grunt - With a grunt
noted him - saw him (to avoid repetition)
Your late - You're late
wasrather - was rather
| Hii-tan chapter 1 . 8/9/2016
This is probably the best FoZ Crossover I've ever read. Not just due to how well written it is, but the sheer brilliance of having Louise summon Kyubey as a familiar...
| MatthewBadger chapter 5 . 6/22/2016
| ABSepolen chapter 1 . 5/18/2016
Ahh... heavens no don't sign that contract, Louise. Unless you do want to have your magic improve by turning into a Magical Girl but have you soul trapped in a jewel, suffer from soul sucking torment, and a strong chance of turning into a monster witch then please don't sign that contract from your familiar.
| Mernom chapter 23 . 5/4/2016
You dropped everything to hell, climbed halfway back, and then went East. The way this chapter was written kept me at my toes, and the outcome wasn't too good or bad. Great chapter.