more? please? his is really unique!

PLEASE UPDATE LALJFLDKJLKNDFLKALLAPOODJLDKSFJL

There's no beta on here? Wow, I couldn't tell the difference! It still sounds so good.

That dream that turned into a nightmare :'( It must have been so tormenting for Yuu. I felt like crying after I read that.

I really like the switch over to Yokozawa, I rarely ever see people write in his POV (at least for long). It's very realistic, you did a good job with it :D Yeah it would feel to him that any reminder of Takano would pain him.

Lol at the Sorata parts. Oh well, at least Yokozawa had him. He's a sad cat-lady (except for the fact that he's a guy).

I'm really looking forward to the next chapter! Please update soon!

Thank you!

~Hana

Poor Yuu :(

I hate how Hatori gets the last word. I don't like him in general (sorry if you like him :() because he's boring and unlikeable, and his and Chiaki's relationship because all they do is take advantage of each other.

I don't ship YuuxChiaki because I think Yuu deserves better than that. I always feel so sad for him everytime Chiaki chooses Hatori.

*Ok anti-Hatori rant over*

Good chapter! On to next one :)

Wow, that was a great chapter :D The grammar is perfect, Yuu's feelings and the description of Yokozawa seem right on point, very detailed, and I like the bit of humor with Takano and Onodera. I can tell this will be a great story! Off to the next chapter :D

~Hana

AW! I feel so bad for Yuu and Yokozawa but I never thought to put them together! Can't wait to read more!

i love it

AWESOME!

Great idea for the pairing (they were too lonely and heartbroken to be left like that, weren't they?) and really catchy, especially for a first chapter!

I loved the elevator scene and omg, Yuu is some sort of detective! Great hunch! He just looked at Yokozawa and- bing!- he already knew...

Don't worry about the negative reviews, and just continue straight from where you left...I'll be waiting for next chapter!

Thank you for writing!

E.

While the premise is interesting, it took a good month or so for Yokozawa to even consider anyone new after having his heart broken in canon, and Yuu's been in love with Chiaki for 15 or 20 YEARS, so you may want to consider slowing the pace if you choose to continue ;

Also, there's something to be said for running it through a spelling/grammar check, as you've got a number of errors here. Not the worst by far in this section, but there's room for improvement.

I like this! Please continue! :)

OH MY GOD YOU HAVE THE SAME IDEA AS ME

I'm totally writing about these two as well :D

I mean, it so works. Takano borken heart, Yuu broken heart. They could "heal" it together...

God I want to read more please update soon. SOON. AND I WILL LOVE YOU EVEN MORE.

for mr / ms anonymous... I appreciate your opinion but um... why did you read this if you don't like "tearing a couple apart" ? Maybe this just isn't a fic for you ; but I understand you (a little bit) I'm also very sensitive about fics which aren't canon: for example I'm irritated about Yuu because I like Chiaki/Hatori so much - my sister isn't my beta so please blame me for the mistakes, not her ;

for everyone: I'll get a beta for the future chapters 8) I have experiences of getting a beta & publishing a fic but no one read it. so I didn't want to bother anyone if no one read this.

see ya in the chapter 2 !

I do not, in fact, want to read this, because if you know someone already has a partner in canon, that means you're tearing apart a couple for no apparent reason other than you can. Seriously why the fuck do people in this fandom do this. The entire point of the show is the couples.

Oh and this is not readable. Tell your sister she sucks at editing.

I really like this pairing and wish more authors explored it. I hope you will continue with this. There were a few typos here and there but over all this looks very promising.

I thought the four men at the elevator was a perfect moment and everyone seems very IC so far.