Reviews for Hunters equilibrium
SpiderRidersReviewAnon chapter 1 . 6/26
It's cute, but the grammar and structuring needs a lot of work. For example, Corona telling Hunter to wake up is an entirely different scene from Hunter talking to Shadow about his relationship with Venus. It shouldn't be in the same paragraph, and should actually have a line break. That makes it confusing.

Should be Venus, not Ventus. I also think it would be interesting to know about how Shadow and Venus became a couple. Because they weren't in the anime.

Actually, it's too bad Hunter and Corona never actually sit down to talk about their feelings like this in the anime. It would've solved a lot.
FairyIllyna chapter 1 . 1/24/2012
Hiya! I like the idea, but the punctuation could use some work. Also, I thought Corona's spider is Venus, not Ventus... Is that my mistake or yours? Also, if this is the first chapter, unmark it as complete or else this counts as a oneshot.

Also, some more detail will improve this a lot. Anyway, update soon!
none sorry5 chapter 1 . 1/14/2012
good so far but a bit try making it a bit longer or more detailed