|Reviews for Center Mass|
| EwigeStudentin chapter 1 . 11/20/2013
Very, very nice. Lots of things were scary in advance, and the untold stuff was the scariest, naturally. I was more afraid, however, that you'd let him waltz out of that hall with her o.o now THAT would be scary!
| Hazmatt chapter 1 . 2/18/2013
Incredible story! Very intense! That had to be so hard!
| hester4418 chapter 1 . 12/17/2012
Oh my. I was hoping until the very end that there was some way, any way for it to end other than how it did. But of course there wasn't. And I'm literally fighting tears now... Terribly well written and absolutely heartbreaking.
| Cerulean.Phoenix7 chapter 1 . 6/22/2012
Wow. I literally let out a breath and whispered "My God" at the end of this.
This is masterful and brilliant.
Everything about these characters is so right: their interactions, their personalities, every little thing is done right.
The character of Xarvon is creepy, vengeful and merciless, much like many unforgettable villians of lore. His words while he tried to take Janeway were haunting and frightening, because of the conviction in his voice. I knew, just by the way you wrote him, that he meant everything he said, and that's the scariest thing about him.
I'll admit it took me a little while to remember Harren, but when I did this pit of dread and shock formed in me, because to break a person with such resolve and calm as Harren... I just can't even imagine. That is one of the most haunting parts about this piece.
The final spiral to the end is a mesmerizing thing that is going to stay with me for a while. The decisiveness of Janeway's decision, Chakotay's own pain at the decision he must make, and the love that flutters through the air around them.
This is full of wonderful images and lines, a few of my favourites being:
"Like broken flesh, fresh stonedust has a sharp scent. Together, they are savory, metallic, familiar."..."and in the span of the heartbeat that never drums in his chest, Chakotay's entire world narrows to the width of a single face, to a pair of glittering blue eyes. From across the room, he can map every detail of her complexion, every mark of so-called imperfection that makes her face unique to human eyes."
"The targeted fury pinches her expression"..."Below Chakotay seethes an ocean of panic, waves of ice-fury are licking past his legs, curling higher around his chest."
"...yet Chakotay's finger is frozen on the trigger of his phaser, his bones brittle ribbons of ice curled around burning warm metal."
"It shouldn't surprise him that this is how she'll meet her end. In control. Giving orders. Fully cognizant of the sacrifice she's making and why she's making it. Never thinking about what that sacrifice will do to those she leaves behind, never questioning the part that comes after. It was always like her to be that way about her own death. In this tortured instant, he both fiercely loves and bitterly hates her for it."
This final one is one fo my favourites, because it encompasses sa many words into just a few: "He tries to tell her with his last gaze; he would gladly have given her everything. Anything but this."
Haunting, beautiful, and true to everything that these characters are. This is one the best fanfics I've ever read.
Keep up the fantastic work, QS.
| Alpha Flyer chapter 1 . 3/24/2012
I don't know how I missed this when it first came out - just found it on someone's favourite list. And it is going on mine. I had to read it twice, because the first time I found myself galloping through it for the sheer adrenaline-pounding suspense of it. The second time I read it to find the light in the darkness that you always leave us with. It was hard, this time, but then self-sacrifice (here, times two) is a creature of both light and darkness, appreciated more in the abstract than in the heart. Beautifully done.
| LynnEGib chapter 1 . 2/20/2012
You sure know how to break someone's heart.
| FlamingPhoenix202 chapter 1 . 2/11/2012
This story is by far one of the most saddest voyager fics I have read in my lifetime. But it is very well writen. If it were not for the skills of the author, this fic wouldn't be the greatness that it is. The characters are well in character, and I believe that they would have acted in this manor if it were an actual episode. Chakotay's care for Janeway is so sweet, and very strong. And the begining, which I know some would think of as spanning too long down the page, was in fact not boring at all.
Thank you for writing this! It's sure to get me teary-eyed every time
| Rascal207 chapter 1 . 1/15/2012
Brilliant as ever! Left me gasping and pushing down my tears in the end. It's fascinating, how much emotions, inner turmoils, drama, passion you are able to put into a one chapter story and you have me on my edge, always. Love it!
| Oparu chapter 1 . 1/15/2012
That was brilliant never seems to apply as well to dark things. This was pitch dark, and all the more emotionally tense for it. I love the insight into Chakotay's mind: that cold sort of rationality he has in a crisis. Gorgeous work.
| Young Khaleesi chapter 1 . 1/14/2012
Pulse Pounding, Gut Wrenching, Adrenalin Pumping, Tear Jerking...it was just from the table to the door, but WOW! WHAT A RIDE!
| CanonAntithesis chapter 1 . 1/14/2012
Wow. That was incredibly well-written as always and even though the ending sucked, that was the only way to adequately finish it.
I love all of your dark writing.
Hey, I have a question for you. Now, admittedly, I have no life. So I was looking through some sections of VAMB that I normally ignore and came across a thread where you were talking about writing a fic where the Maquis were in charge with a sort of alpha-Chakotay. This was way back in 2008. Did anything ever happen with it? I'd love to know. Thanks and Happy New Year ... a little late.
| Mizvoy chapter 1 . 1/14/2012
Wow, this is powerful and soooo good. Of course, this could have happened a dozen times over on their journey. I absolutely adore the silent communication between them as Chakotay comes to terms with what he has to do. Yummy. And, after 'Endgame,' I am more than able to "choose my own adventure." It didn't happen, but it could have. Soooo good!
| badmelk chapter 1 . 1/14/2012
| PinkAngel17 chapter 1 . 1/14/2012
I left a comment over on VAMB, but I thought it worth repeating that this was just amazing! So powerful and tense to the point that the ending makes that first part with all the humor seem very bittersweet. I don't usually like character death fics, but this was just too awesome not to like and was perfectly well done for the characters involved.
| every1ssleeping chapter 1 . 1/14/2012
Your writing is as amazing as always. I think this would be my favorite of your stories so far...
...even if you've just happened to kill my favorite character ;-)