Reviews for The Games of Moriarty
Muffinmilk317 chapter 19 . 1/8/2013
Please write more! This is the most fantastic amazing incredible story! I couldn't put it down! It was so awesome! I love it so much I am going to read some chapters over again! I love the chapter where Aelita said "Why should we listen to you pathetic Xana slave?!" I loved that! Please write more. It was a great story and you should finish it. It is really something to be proud of. Thank you
Muffinmilk317 chapter 12 . 1/4/2013
Your story is so fantastic I put it down!
toastedCroissants chapter 19 . 12/31/2012 I have no words as to describe how BRILLIANT your work is! Once I made an account on this site, I immediately favorited, and followed your story. I just love it THAT much!

First things first: Moriarty is one of the most scariest antagonists of all time! He's so smart and cunning, it's almost disturbing... (by the way, that's a good thing (:)

Second, I loved how you also were able to involve a lot of the secondary characters in Code Lyoko that were barely mentioned in the series. They mixed together in the story so well. I am so fond of Natalya, and I can feel the heat between her and William. (:

Thirdly, the plot is brilliant! Especially how you were able to add Moriarty into Franz's past, and have it make sense too. (: I love all the details, and you nailed their involvement with the government and computers so perfectly! I also love how you were able to balance the battlefield between Earth and Lyoko, making the fight difficult on both sides.

Lastly, you deserve MUCH more reviews! This story has great length, and I can tell you worked very hard thinking and planning the plot, and writing the story itself. I can't imagine me writing a story as long as yours.. ever. Even if I'm only thirteen. Never ever in my life can I imagine that.

All in all, I love your story, and I CANNOT WAIT for more chapters!

Yours Truly,
toastedCroissants 3
Muffinmilk317 chapter 1 . 12/31/2012
This is the most fascinating, suspenseful, dramic story! It is better than all th other Fanfics that I read. It is I really good it actually be a plot line for CLE!
Rylee Wyatt chapter 19 . 12/30/2012
Ah! I loved this chapter! It is excellent as usual, and I can never find any errors, which is one of my "talents" while reading fanfiction. Good job!

Have you heard of the new season of Code Lyoko? I loved the first episode, but I always think back to how they should have done your script instead.
Blueblur2000 chapter 18 . 12/16/2012
YES! PERFECT CHAPTER! Each character had just enough showtime that i mixed together into a perfect mental movie. It was very(In the sense of the show's theme) Realistic. Giving Jeremie, Ulrich AND Yumi the spotlight was a great idea saying as it added conflict to the already conflicted group. Plus, you didn't completely leave out Odd and Aelita, saying as they had their extremely important moments. This was great. I also loved how you added the looming thundercloud of danger over Jeremie. With his confidence and composure cracking and the implied future deadly actions to be thrown at Jeremie -by Moriarty, of course- It added a needed amount of suspense, danger, romance and angst. Oooo I awaait more great works with such components in the near future, my friend. Your talent inspires and impresses your readers, as I have come to understand. You are the story I look forward to reading every month. The author that makes my email inbox my most visited location on the web just to see if you've made an update. Never quit! You'll go far! BlueBlur2000 is out!
Read ON!
Guest chapter 7 . 12/15/2012
Guest chapter 17 . 11/18/2012
What can I say that hasn't already been said? The fan fiction is simply brilliant in terms of plot and characters. I literally kept reading it all day up until this point. I can't wait to see what happens next. :)
Shiza Hako chapter 17 . 11/5/2012
Well ...that was interesting as always but I wonder what's gonna happen next. I SHIFT ALL BLAME TO AELITA
Rylee Wyatt chapter 17 . 11/3/2012
For some reason the stupid thing wouldn't let me log in.

Gooooddd chappie, I loved it, as usual. :D It's getting pretty interesting, I can't wait to see how it progresses from here.
whiskiii chapter 1 . 11/4/2012
I love this! Took me all day TO READ THE FIRST CHAPTER!
Neon Lice chapter 17 . 11/3/2012
Brilliant as always.
I particularly enjoy your attention to the little details, calling back memories of the actual TV show. For instance, Jim's poor drawing ability, as seen in Teddygodzilla and Williams terrible dancing prowess as seen in Season 2. Plus, the plot point you are bringing back up from several chapters ago make it actually seem like a real TV show, and it is rewarding for those who have stuck with it so long to see these side-stories getting answered.

Blueblur: Originally, this chapter was going to be combined with the next one, but Ragnarok said that he would loose too many important details. While I can't promise what form the action will come in, I'm pretty sure you will see plenty action in the next part.

Blue Moon: Yah, I noticed that too...I did not mention it when I was editing, because I did not find it too distracting, but going back, I see what you mean. I would edit that part out, while you still have the chance, Ragnorak.
You also bring an interesting point up that " Jeremie should start getting some of the authorities in government involved. Or at least poses some of them to create an even playing field." There is some difficulties with getting the government involved. I'm not saying its out of the question, its just more difficult then just calling the police on the "Hero of Paris". But there are some people within the deep parts of the government that do know his past, so again, not totally out of the question. As for possessing someone...there is a bit of a morality issue there. Jeremie is not XANA, or Moriarity. XANA does not really have a sense of morality, just efficiency, so he has no qualms with taking someones body. Moriarty is twisted and cruel, and does not care if he forces someone to do unspeakable things. Similar to why Batman does not kill, Jeremie does not take control of someones body. Sure he sends specters into them, like when he did that with Odd in season 2 and Mr. Stern in the past chapter, but he did not take their willpower, or conscience away. I'm not saying its impossible for that to happen in this series, but it will be something that goes against Jeremie nature, especially in fear of the time when he almost became like XANA.
Silentiarius chapter 17 . 11/3/2012
Good chapter, as for your rant, I feel really empathetic. I'm in 11th grade AP English and I wonder how in the hell anyone managed to get in the class besides me and a few others. When students take "Mankind" to mean only men then we've got problems, big problems...
Lywick chapter 17 . 11/3/2012
Beautiful. THere was only one error I could find.:

Yumi turns her head to Jeremie.

Jeremie: Explanation?

Jeremie nods but seems unsure.

Jeremie: I'm working on it. I have an idea, but-

Yumi: Still not positive?

I think you might have wanted Yumi to say "Explanation", But the error did nothing to distract the reader rom the story as a whole. And now that Moriarty has Ulrich's dad what is going to happen next. I really feel that Jeremie should start getting some of the authorities in government involved. Or at least poses some of them to create an even playing field. Moriarty having control of such powerful business will prove to be disastrous in the coming updates. Can't wait to see more from you!
blueblur2000 chapter 17 . 11/3/2012
NICE! Pretty good chapter. Though, to keep myself as... well, myself, I have to ask that you put some more action into the next chapter. Fighting scenes on Earth and Huge choices for a lot of the group members. Whe I say group, i mean original group. This will definately grab the reader's attention. plus, added in with this new twist that you just added in (Which was well written I have to say) There will obviously be some drama centered around the group. BUT, I am not the writer. Therefore, I shouldn't be telling you what to do with your story. Now, on a less self-centered note, KEEP WRITING! Your great and this plot could easily become a book! Honestly, your an author who's work I look forward to reading. Update soon!

One of your eternally dedicated readers,
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