Reviews for When I Least Deserve It
Incoming Grapefruit chapter 1 . 9/27/2012
I'd honestly forgotten how much I adored your writing. And after being absent from FF for so long, I just HAD to stop by and take a peek at any stories that I had yet to read. Did I mention how much I loved your writing? Are you sure. Well, the sentiment applies tenfold to every paragraph of this story.

The barb about the blue cloak had me laughing - "Merlin really should have gotten one of those – everyone else had one for their errands of sneakery" - and it kept the story from turning too dark. Masterfully done.

The way you had Merlin's guilt bubbling to the surface as he finally admitted to everything, siphoning just enough truth from the tale to make the confession incriminatory. Typical, humble Merlin. But I liked it even more how Arthur already knew about about - and accepted - that Dragoon had been unable to save Uther.

And the hug. You get bonus points for the hug, it was wondrous. With just enough light humour ("You lost your memory?"/"You *hugged* me?") to keep it in-character throughout. Marvellous.

Beautifully written, and a joy to read! And I know it's pot-calling-kettle-black, given how infrequently I've posted stories this past year, but I truly hope you continue to write stories in the near future. xxx
JoyfulWhispersInternet chapter 1 . 8/30/2012
really great ;D I remember you being one of the first writers I ever read when I discovered fanfiction, and it's nice to see your getting this good at writing :)
Charged Lightning chapter 1 . 7/22/2012
This is wonderful. One of the best reveal fics out there. Mainly because in this fic Arthur and Merlin aren't overly characterized with reactions and thoughts that no one can relate to. They're just human beings. And the way you ended it was fantastic, because it really resembles real life.
MamzelleHermy chapter 1 . 7/17/2012
I loved it! I loved it! I loved it! I want a reveal like that!
Guest chapter 1 . 6/28/2012
This is probably one of the best reveal!fics because it allows for a situation where Arthur can act calmly about Merlin without condemning him in the interim. Keep up the good work.
Moaning Merlin chapter 1 . 4/7/2012
This has to be one of my favourite reveal fics. I love the way you chose to approach it! Very clever, cute, and typical of Merlin :)
irezel chapter 1 . 3/20/2012
! I want it to be this waaaaaaaaaaay! ;_;
rizandace chapter 1 . 3/7/2012
I have read a LOT of reveal fics. Yours is my favorite! It was unique and interesting and very original. I had never thought of the angle of Merlin trying to convince Arthur that his magic was evil, rather than trying to convince him that magic can be good. It made for a very interesting story.

I feel like your characterization is right on. Arthur has gotten to know Merlin better as the show has progressed, and certainly would notice if Merlin was trying to sneak a goodbye into conversation. I also love that he kept his head when Merlin said that he let his father die. I really hate reading fics where Arthur goes crazy and tries to kill Merlin without giving anything one second of thought. I mean... I know Arthur can be hot-headed, but he's not THAT crazy.

I also loved the way you ended it - no promises, or anything... We know that what Merlin has done in lying to Arthur is going to have negative consequences for their relationship. But you gave hope that they would work it out, even if it took some time.

Truly stellar work. Keep on writing! (Sorry about the long review... when I get excited about something I tend to ramble).
neko no warai chapter 1 . 2/10/2012
I really loved this. If the writers of the show wrote that crucial revealing moment anything like this, I think I could die happy! I loved how, for once, instead of Merlin trying to tell Arthur all of the good things he's done with magic, he is instead trying to convince him of the bad so Arthur will let him go. And it's even more beautiful that Arthur overcame his own anger and hurt to see right through Merlin. Really, just perfect. Wonderfully written and full of real emotion. Thank you for putting this up

(Also, from this, I checked out the rest of your stories, and they are all equally as awesome. Seriously-all of them. I absolutely love the way you write for Merlin!)
Cajast chapter 1 . 2/2/2012

This is adorable and exactly how the reveal should go next year.

You are a wonderful person. I love you. In a totally platonic, internet-y kind of way.

My favorite part was the:



I don't know why that's my favorite out of all the wonderful things in that story, but I could see them saying those two lines perfectly in my head.


Pawthorn chapter 1 . 1/28/2012
Good! Good good good. I think that's the best reveal fic I've ever read. Very good, very in-character. I like the bit about the hugging thrown in- I think it's a little unjust that Merlin has no memory of the only time Arthur's hugged him. I also love the title of this. And the way you were able to communicate Arthur's emotions through Merlin's eyes. Well done. Write more :)
ArodieltheElfofRohan chapter 1 . 1/28/2012
This was really good. Nice job! :)
The-Rainbow-of-Imagination chapter 1 . 1/27/2012
very good ) Merlin is very in character, good job )

Kitty O chapter 1 . 1/23/2012
No. No Mithian. Only Arwen. But I'll accept Mithian/Merlin. If I have to. I really want to give Mithian Percival, because he's the only one I have no ship for (well, I want him myself but that's not allowed).

["I stole your free will when Morgana took Camelot last year. I said you were knocked out, but you were wide awake the whole time, blundering about like a village idiot. I enchanted you, watched you putter around like a child, so eager to please, and I enjoyed it."] dang it, if only it weren't true! I was so mad at Merlin in that moment I had to forgive Arthur for threatening Merlin in 4.11. And I had been REALLY mad about that! bad choices, Merls!

Aww SMART Arthur, putting back together. And Merlin's interesting life means that all of that was true... And a lie.

Brilliant. Made me sad and happy.
Laughy-Taffy the Grape chapter 1 . 1/19/2012
That was a very sweet story. Er, and angsty. You know. I feel a little . . . strange. But I liked it. I liked it a lot.
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