Reviews for Bluestar's grief
ur mom chapter 2 . 8/22/2012
wow, lot good her father is at a time like this...stupid basterd
Mel. with blue and black wings chapter 4 . 3/14/2012
Awesome job! :D
Blackish chapter 1 . 1/17/2012
Capitalize your title properly.

[their pelts spiked with water and anger]

It should be "spiky". "Spiked" is what people say when someone sneaks alcohol into a drink.

[ at least thats what Goosefeather said,]

"Thats" should be "that's" (the short form of "that is").

[She didn't smell the same, the Mint and Lilac didn't cover]

Replace the comma with a semicolon, and don't capitalize mint and lilac.

[ looking up at the star's]

"Stars". If you say "star's", that actually means "star is".

[ who's head was resting]



I like how Bluepaw thinks of her mother's death in terms of the herbs. It really highlights how pointless Moonflower's death was. However, this chapter is really, really short. I think my review has almost the same number of words. Write /more/; devote more than two or three sentences to describing how the characters feel.