|Reviews for The Phantom Prince|
| Guest chapter 3 . 1/23/2013
Please I'll die if you don't go on
| Darkfrost chapter 3 . 8/13/2012
Please update this story I want to see what really happens in this story. Like why did Danny's parent's change after he was born?
| Seaangel chapter 3 . 3/1/2012
great chapter, I want to see what Danny's reaction but be when he founds out.
| Phantom's-Apprentice96 chapter 3 . 2/5/2012
Really liking the story so far! Update soon!
| VampireFrootloopsRule chapter 3 . 1/31/2012
Hehehe. We know whats gonna happen... well, possibly. Its an iffy subject... loed this chapter. Necesary background presented in an interesting way that keeps the readers attention. Very nicep
| Stangmanism chapter 3 . 1/30/2012
another good chapter.
you have a little issue with the focus of the perspective. it seems like you are using Danny and Sam as the focus of a third person perspective, but when dealing with his mother, and when Sam and Danny are together perspective seems to switch without any clue.
I still like the concept of this story, and am looking forward to the next chapter.
| Life In Ivy chapter 3 . 1/30/2012
Dogs are often given to people who have fits, because they can stop them from hurting themselves when they have spasms. Danny has always wanted a dog- you should consider it! I like your story so far, but I swear I will come hunt you down and kill you if Danny dies... Nice writing. Keep at it!
| Thunderrules chapter 3 . 1/29/2012
Great chapter, keep updating
| jeanette9a chapter 3 . 1/29/2012
| Elle Aitch chapter 3 . 1/29/2012
So, first off, this chapter was pretty good overall.
There's definitely a sense that the story is starting to move forward, and that's always a good sign. Even though this chapter felt like it dragged a little bit to me (and really, that may just be me since I'm a bit out of sorts at the moment), there were definitely a few interesting things that happened. I liked the bit with Danny and his ghost detection device, mostly because I'm interested in knowing what ghosts were there, as well as the bit about his ghost sense . . . Hmm . . . I don't remember if you said it or not, but is he aware in the story that the chill he's getting and the foggy breath signals that a ghost is nearby? If he's been experiencing these kinds of threats before-where ghosts are following him home or where the device on his wrist is picking them up-I'd be a bit surprised if he doesn't see the connection there between the sudden chill and the presence of a ghost. Having gone back and reread it a little bit, I'm under the impression that he does since it seems like it was the chill that made him check the watch, but still, I figured I'd ask anyway just to see what you said.
I'm still obviously curious about just what's up with Danny (and obviously have some speculations at this point), and this chapter definitely added to the mystery there. I think building that kind of suspense might be one of the strongest aspects of your writing-you've done an excellent job of giving just enough details and pieces of information to make me curious but not enough that I'm one hundred percent confident I already know the answer, and with each chapter you've offered a little more, so no complaints there.
My favorite part of this one was probably the interaction between Maddie and Danny, but I pretty much love any scene between those two. That and this one was great because again, it added to the mystery while still offering some information (kind of followed the more things you learn the more questions you have bit, y'know?).
For some reason, though, I had to re-read that scene with the classroom and then Dash's subsequent taunting twice to understand what made him and his classmates leap to the conclusion that Danny's parents gave up the ghost hunting because of Danny, but that may not be through any fault of your own or your writing. I'm a bit out of sorts today since I've been fairly sick and I stupidly went to work anyway today when I should've stayed home, but . . . yup. Rambling here. You probably don't care, lol, but if parts of this review sound like madness, then that might be why. ;)
Hmm, what else? I don't know if you care about typos or not (some do, some don't), but there's a point where you're missing an article near the end. You wrote ". . . one of her own students was a Fenton and thus object of disdain." I'm assuming you meant to say "an object" or something. Just figured I'd mention it in case you cared, but really, it's not anything big, so don't worry too much about it. Most people will probably read right through it without noticing anything's wrong or weird about it at all. :)
Obviously, I'm totally excited about your next chapter, since it seems like a few answers might be forthcoming and since it'll be interesting to see how horribly the kids plans go awry, 'cause, well, I just have no faith that they're gonna be thrilled with how everything turns out from their little basement mission, especially if a certain ghost portal is still around . . .
| Oak Leaf Ninja chapter 3 . 1/29/2012
Bravo! Great chapter! Update soon!
| Fluehatraya chapter 3 . 1/29/2012
Man, this story just keeps on becoming more and more interesting! I don't think my on-the-edge anticipation for what happens next has died down for the entire current duration of the fic.
| baby Cyclopes chapter 3 . 1/29/2012
Yay can't wait for next chapter!
| baby Cyclopes chapter 2 . 1/27/2012
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