|Reviews for YS: Love Bites|
| a chapter 1 . 11/5/2012
thatt was a good but maybe next time make it longer pls?
| Heart's Promise chapter 2 . 6/22/2012
Its so unfair of them...fingers crossed they change their minds.
| Heart's Promise chapter 1 . 6/22/2012
Hiya I liked this alot cute with very steamy love making. I didn't really believe Iruka's dirty talk cos he seems to much of a prude to let go so quickly I think if it was Kakashi asking if he wanted him in same words it would have been better. Not a flame btw just an opinion.
| LoveToTheCucumber chapter 1 . 2/2/2012
Nice story. I was surprised over the fact that Iruka was being so dominant :o?
| Cardboard Bike chapter 1 . 1/17/2012
'Hinata red' should be made a genuine colour, heh.
Just a hint: when you write dialogue, each speaker deserves a new line. Apart from being proper layout this also makes it easier to tell at a glance who is speaking. For example your last paragraph should be laid out like this:
As Naruto explained to them that Iruka had gotten laid, Kakashi went up to where Iruka sat to retrieve a mission. As Kakashi grabbed one, Iruka whispered in his ear, "Tonight, my place or yours?"
Kakashi smiled and whispered back, "I'll get you when you get off okay?"
Iruka smiled back and let Kakashi go. As Team 7 left, Iruka couldn't help but think 'Love bites, but hey so do I.'