|Reviews for Eragon Alone|
| Joseph chapter 32 . 7/27
More more more I need more keep going keep going keep going
| Guest chapter 32 . 7/13
Yo this stuff is amazing! Are you ever going to continue it?
| Joseph chapter 32 . 7/11
More continue you have been slacking please more its too good im gonna die if i dont read more
| Restrained.Freedom chapter 32 . 6/29
Looking forward to seeing what these three can do...
Escape is not impossible...
| Guest chapter 32 . 6/25
This is a fantastic story! It could be one of the books, you know the characters and the setting and situation so well, and you write with the same style. This is a truely amazing fanfiction, I hope you get time to update soon! Gah, I read the whole thing today, and it ends at the good part! :,( :P. Keep writing! XD
| The Age of Awesomeness chapter 32 . 6/7
Great work! Keep it up! I love it! Keep updating!
| Zeus795 chapter 32 . 6/2
Very well done so far keep it up
| Guest chapter 32 . 5/26
PLS UPDATE AND DO ERAGON BUSTING THE PRIESTS SKULLS!(OR RORAN)
| explodingbunnies52 chapter 32 . 5/22
great chapter thanks!
| Elemental Dragon Slayer chapter 32 . 5/15
Very good, very good. :D enjoyed the chapter. Look forward to this one-shot you'll put up soon hopefully too.
More recruits for Eragon I see... and then there were, um.. how ever many there are now joining Eragon. xD
| Hermione Jean Burton xxx chapter 32 . 5/15
You have just given me spoilers for the bloody movie, sorry for the language, I'm british :). I haven't even watched it yet!
But anyway, brilliant story and great chapter! :D Keep it up
| Ky111 chapter 32 . 5/15
Great chapter and it's good to get a bit of back story on Eragon's cell mates, hopefully they can help each other escape, although I' sure help is also coming as Saphira wont be idle and most likely getting help.
Until the next one.
| Snowy Analia chapter 32 . 5/14
This is really good
| V-rcingetorix chapter 32 . 5/14
The emotion in this chapter is excellent, driving the storyline very well.
However, Eragon's emotion seem to be written too fast. As an example, take the paragraph ending in: '"We do not trust you." Perdix responded, dashing Eragon's hopes.'
The problem with this is how quickly Eragon's hopes were raised and smashed. One possible solution is to have Eragon beginning to hope at the beginning of the chapter, inserting how the vague beginnings of a plan are coalescing in his mind. Then, feed that hope, with Eragon's interest in the stories; possibly phrase it as his wanting to know the capabilities of his potential-escapees.
Then, a little thought in how he should ask them. Why would he ask them to trust him so soon? Maybe rephrasing the question, perhaps as: "What would the two of you think of a joint escape? Would you trust me to help, and not betray me?" Although that's a little obtuse; Olyvar has already rejected Galbatorix, and so would either be willing to betray Eragon for favor, or get revenge by not saying anything.
Otherwise, you have an excellent chapter. The backstory is intriguing, and the characters are likable. When OC chars are introduced, I have a little reservation, but these two seem to be doing fairly well. I'm reserving judgement, but so far so good.
Keep up the good work!
| hurdygurd chapter 1 . 5/14
THIS IS WONDERFUL MORE PLEASE