|Reviews for Engulfed In Pride|
| spellsoffire chapter 1 . 12/5/2013
The set up, anticipation and execution was awesome.
| Gcoolio chapter 1 . 4/24/2013
one word: AMAZING
| Sesshoumaru'smate4ever chapter 1 . 4/23/2012
hey sorry for not reviewing! i usually read stories from my phone but its to butting slow(sorry for my language) but here i am reviewing. ok here it goes. I enjoy how detailed your story is and how long it is even for a short story(even though you didn't really meant to do it). I really loved how started off the story and showing their relationship till the end. I truly enjoyed how you portrayed the characters like you knew them. Cause i usually dislike it when the characters goes out of character unless its well written. I'd like to repeat my love on how you showed their relationship through time and how the settings seems more real with the death of Joseph and Lily's pain over someone she truly didn't know but had at the very least a ten minute conversation with. And I loved how you ended it with together at last and that they didn't 'end' but still together. at last.
| wrenthewriter chapter 1 . 3/24/2012
i really loved this story :) The characters and places were all described really well, and nothing seemed too sudden or out of place. Keep on writing! xx
| overstreets chapter 1 . 2/24/2012
Vicky, I absolutely loved this! Jily is amazing and so is this fic, even though I was a little wary at the length. I love you she went from "Omfg, it's james!" to "I heart you, james!" and the last little section there...wow! That was absolutely stunning!
How did you manage to write this much and still keep the reader riveted? Keep writing!
| WeasleySeeker chapter 1 . 2/13/2012
My goodness, that was absolutely wonderful. My favourite line had to be "...Lily realises that she has changed…and with each change, James Potter comes ever more dangerously close to being allowed access to her heart." That just encompasses everything, wow. This is the first really good canon story I have read for ages, it's really refreshing actually :)
Anyway, it was really nice to see a long one-shot that has a nice, developing plot. I really liked Lily's reaction to James on the train to start with, I though that was great. And it was really good how you skipped to her fifth year so that you could show the transition between her hating him and falling in love with him, you got it perfectly. And you got so much emotion into one short story! It was funny, sweet and heartbreaking all at once. And I especially love that she sought sanctuary in the library, and that that's where their first kiss was, awwwhh :')
| warefrt chapter 1 . 2/4/2012
I'm sorry for not reviewing. I really did enjoy this story. I think you gave both Lily and James very good character. I also like how you included the Order in this. I think it was very well written!
| Audriel chapter 1 . 2/3/2012
You have an interesting take of James and Lily's relationship. Though you make James far cockier than the impression I have of him. But then again, he is quite Slytherin-like for a Gryffindor considering his treatment to Snape in Fifth Year. However, his clear distinction of right and wrong, light and dark magic seems to be his greatest decider when he was finally sorted into Gryffindor. This is the first fic I read where James and Lily (and the Marauders) were recruited before graduation and has even been considered in Sixth year. But I can see where it's coming and it can be a justification why Voldemort chose the Potters over the Longbottoms. It's also interesting how they just sort of fall together once Lily realize her feelings, showing that they are meant to be and any sort of resistance is futile.
| autumn midnights chapter 1 . 2/2/2012
Wow this is long, XD. Wonderfully written, first of all - I didn't notice any spelling or grammar mistakes. At first I was a little confused as to why you bothered changing the meeting on the train, but I think your version works just as well - if not better in this particular fic - as the canon version. Lily and James are both wonderfully characterized, and still in-character with the little we see of them. I love how this shows the gradual change from her completely hating him, then to tolerating him, and then to liking/possibly loving him. The banter between James and Lily is very amusing and fits well with the tone of the story also. Sometimes long fics like this drag on, but this one kept the reader's interest all within one chapter. I really enjoyed reading this, and you did an excellent job.
| quafflex3 chapter 1 . 1/30/2012
I'm so sorry! I was reading this around one in the morning and it was so good I had to finish all of it so as soon as I finished I went to bed because I had school in the morning. I usually try to review on the stories I enjoy too. :/
Anyway, I love the Lily/James stories that show the gradual movement of Lily's feelings from hate/extreme dislike and love. I think you portrayed that in a fantastic way. I also enjoyed reading about the Order too. I always wonder how Lily, James, and everyone got into the Order so I do enjoy reading different takes on that. I love how much detail you put into the story. I love the character you gave both Lily and James too.
I really enjoyed this story and I hope to see more from you! Once again I apologize for not reviewing right away.
| Sinister Spiders chapter 1 . 1/30/2012
Absolutely brilliant. This was so detailed and you managed to create real, believable, characters out of Lily and James. This is terribly greedy but I would love to see more! That said though- the ending was beautiful.
You managed to capture so many years, events and feelings in your words that I truly got a sense of your Lily. The transformation from "hate" to "love" was well done, with the inclusion of the Order (And Charles Brandon- hehe- I am glad you mentioned that in your Author's note as I was going to ask what made you add him in), to teach them the fragility of life.
This tale turned out so well that you should feel "engulfed in pride" about the wonderful story you spun.
Great stuff :)
| Colin Creevey chapter 1 . 1/29/2012
Good story. I find Lily and James fic underrated and for good reason. Your story proves they are worth reading. Well done.
| Simply Paranoia chapter 1 . 1/28/2012
This was an excellent story!
I love the Lily/James pairing so much!
I loved your descriptions and it flowed nicely, especially with the jump of years.
I liked how this could be canonish with the stuff you kept included from the books. I love stories like that.
It was really depressing when you killed Joseph right after we met him. It was rather sad!
I really liked that they finally got together in the end. It ended sweetly!
Well great job!
| wildwriterrr chapter 1 . 1/28/2012
I like how you flash between the years and the way you describe them. You write the characters amazing, the entire time I was reading I thought Dumbledore was flawless. Lily and James, I dunno, you like captured their essence then spurred it into little oneshots, into one big oneshots and the was just beautiful. I love the epiphany Lily has when they kiss; it's so asdfghjkklhhud; that you say it been buried underneath and the library scene was my favourite and yeah.
I'm sorry for such a shit review but idk how to type my jumble of positive emotions for you to clearly understand lolol xxxx
| lowi chapter 1 . 1/28/2012
omg I can't believe it this is so fantastic and it's for me and it's so long and so well written and ahabjajahahahhaj
vicky I love you. You're a fantastic writer, truly, you write EXTREMELY well and this was so good and truly made my day &hearts
I love this pairing and I loved how you wrote them AND THANKS FOR THE ENDING because I was all nervous about it being tragic and I was like "no let them have a happy ending" and you gave them one and that was just ajbahakahavhakaia.
And the title, it worked so well, I can't. :')
Okay sorry for this review being a mess, but I loved this, and I have slept about nothing, so.
Thanks again, I love you!