|Reviews for The First Warriors|
| a random reader chapter 6 . 7/1/2013
wow, reading this really remind me that this isn't your pokemon story.
| a random reader chapter 5 . 10/15/2012
this is getting serious..
| Flameboo chapter 1 . 10/12/2012
Great story! More reviews on their way.
One comment: maybe shorter chapters? This is a good length here, but I noticed that on your most recent chapter it was a lot longer. If you chopped up the chapters, you'd be able to update more. No pressure, though- if you prefer updating longer chapters, go for it!
| Some Guy chapter 4 . 8/25/2012
Whoa this is getting intense. & I love how Red and Leaf are finally getting along. Please update soon its an amazing story
| PostiveCharm416 chapter 4 . 7/28/2012
i hope you write more since this is so soon!
| a random reader chapter 4 . 7/27/2012
i can't believe that i haven't notice that this has been update. TT
well anyway all the guilt aside, both of them have been fighting nonstop and it's quite entertaining to see them alone with each other. all Blue wanted was some peace, not some wounds. oh Janine enter the scene,
| yummy chapter 1 . 7/25/2012
This story is amazing, I hope you make more 3
| MountainLord-92 chapter 1 . 4/17/2012
i have been resisting reading this, as i wanted to wait until you had uploaded more of it, but you introduced Charlotte in 8ES so i felt i ought to read this chapter in order to find out who the hell she is. i am glad i understand who she is now, but it has conjured up so many more questions i almost wonder whether i would have been better off waiting until she made herself known in 8ES. she is certainly an interesting character.
you have put an extra sinister twist onto team Rocket, i suppose i should have expected it with what was happening in 8ES, they originally are simply a criminal organisation that mistreats pokemon now they have motivations in line with Team Galactic et al. this is fine, i am not one of these people who will shout at you and call you a blasphemer for changing things like this for your own purposes, like you changed Gold, this is what fanfic is for. the one problem i do have is that Giovanni is already seeing the children as a threat when the whole point is that he underestimates the main character because he is just a child; at this stage in the procedings he would merely see them as a bunch of kids going off on their adventures, there is no reason to believe they will definitely grow into powerful trainers even a few years down the line.
overall, good start, this is an interesting twist to the traditional story and i shall be interested to see how you go from here.
| a random reader chapter 3 . 3/26/2012
wow this chapter just wow.
Blue got a crush huh? i wonder how that turn out.
i feel bad for the three of them, getting beat up like that.
but at least Amber restore their spirits of youth (Naruto much?)
and things just getting really exciting,
| a random reader chapter 2 . 2/3/2012
so this is the remake. wow, their info was burned just like that? ouch.
and right on the beginning there's already someone died? oh wow. this is getting freaking great, i can't wait to read what happen. update soon.
| Aura Master chapter 2 . 1/27/2012
Hm, intresting. Continue.