|Reviews for A Case of Indomitable Vibrations|
| Puckabrinaluver chapter 1 . 2/23
God, I'd be a mortified Kid Flash. Yeah... Embarrassing for Robin too, though. This whole thing made me laugh, and I could nearly feel the sexual frustration oozing off the page, if that's not weird.
| Phoenix51 chapter 1 . 8/16/2013
| andysanime chapter 1 . 5/31/2013
I liked this but... eheheh... I feel kind of bad for Wally when Batman does decide to do something... .'.
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/27/2013
Now I curious... How did Wally managed it? :D
| Guest chapter 1 . 1/2/2013
Dying of blood loss
| ryokablade chapter 1 . 12/15/2012
'He saw only her face for a quarter second, before she creamed loudly.'
that's a really strange mental image there... lololol.
nice job though, quite hot. well done on this fic :D
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/2/2012
You should have called this fic "Good Vibrations" :P
| TealEyedBeing chapter 1 . 8/3/2012
This was HOT. and it made ME very hot myself x3
| steam-panda chapter 1 . 7/15/2012
| Lady DestinyHope chapter 1 . 5/28/2012
That was actually rather unique, haven't read a fic like this one yet. I really enjoyed this whole story, it incorporated a lot of events not just that one thing.
I did have an idea though. I noticed that you've written a lot of Batman/Robin father fics and slash Wally and Dick. I was thinking it would be rather funny to mix the two. I'm not sure if you've already written this type of story but the idea I had was some where long the lines of Robin bringing Wally home for a family dinner and Batman going all protective angry Daddy on Wally. That would be a really cute and funny scene to read about.
Anyways, just an idea. Hope you'll give it some consideration but either way, wonderful job on this one!
| Tyka's Flower chapter 1 . 5/2/2012
Oh Yay it was very good! Fascinating.
I found it very funny - mostly when poor Wally had ended up in a not quite welcomed place. :P
I felt sorry for him getting so embarrassed many times.
Yeah, the ending was maybe a bit more romantic than funny, but I still think it's good the way it is. Leastways, I like it.
And I liked, futhermore, that there are many paragraphs, short ones, and not so long, which makes the story so "moving on" and I didn't get lost through the long sentences - not that it usually happens if I read something from you. *grins sheepishly* well, I just thought I mention that.
Plus, I like the title of the story; I think it's very creative, and fitting. ;)
| SweetGumdrop chapter 1 . 4/5/2012
I love it! Lol my first Young Justice fic and I adored it!
What does JYAM mean?
| fallenfromthetop chapter 1 . 3/17/2012
I'm no Yaoi fan, but this was amazing, beautifully descirbe and with emotion raging anywhere around, this was the best ROB/KF slash I have ever read.
| puffin chapter 1 . 3/14/2012
Sorry it took me so long to read this. Real life got in the way again. Anyways, great story and I loved the lemon. Chat with ya later.
| foxfire flamequeen chapter 1 . 1/30/2012
Okay, no need for anonymity here. This is your OP for this prompt with a more coherent review, as promised.
First of all, you did it! You made Robin domineering, demanding, and... well, adorable, though I'm not sure how that even works, and still left Wally as the veritable top. And poor, poor Robin, getting more and more sexually frustrated and thus getting crankier and crankier as time went by, while Wally is too busy trying to figure out how to stop Robin from killing him or something. I love the whole funny-in-a-not-so-funny way mood of this whole thing.
-"All you need is practice. Repeat, repeat, repeat."-
Best line. Seriously.
Oh man, the training! The training was awesome and it didn't work! Like, at ALL! I'm rereading this as I type out the review, and I can't stop giggling like crazy. I've had an absolutely terrible night and this is like happy gas for me, you have no idea how much I'm loving it all over again.
It's great that you could come up with a likely enough scenario for Artemis - of course it would be Artemis - to take advantage of her... knowledge (everyone knows. Poor Wally). I was wondering why they'd need this solution, since if Robin couldn't hack a door, Superboy could just punch it out, so he'd have to be out of commission. I did not, however, consider Miss Martian. Her telekinetic abilities means she needs to be out of it as well. I love how Artemis pointed it out, and Wally had to pause for a second, but before he can finish his WTF moment, Robin's all over him. Because it's brilliant and he's a strategist, after all.
*snorts* I find it most amusing that you managed to push both kissing and dry humping, which was optional in the prompt, into one situation. I feel a little bad for Kaldur, but I'd call Artemis a liar if she said she didn't enjoy the show. Especially since Robin can put on one hell of a show.
*giggling again* Then he had to run around with a hard-on! Damn that's cruel.
...As cruel as it is to have him fall into a room with a nearly-naked Artemis in it. Ouch. And then, double ouch. There are many reasons I am glad to be a girl. The lack of such an obvious, exposed vulnerable point is one of them, right up there with having a brain.
This fic had me feeling sorrier and sorrier for Wally as it went by, and then feeling guilty for laughing at him so much, then going, 'Oh, what the hell. Sorry KF.' before putting the guilt out of my mind. I went through all of that the moment Roy said, "Amusement mostly." Because he -would- be there for amusement. Though it's nice that you made him tell Wally why he should let his uncle help. Wally's still a teenager. His speedster uncle telling him why he should talk to a speedster about a speed-related problem would have flown right over his head. And it worked! I had imagined Robin's 'training' would pay off eventually, but honestly this is more realistic. Though I do NOT envy Wally. What exactly did Flash do to help him get over -this- problem?
I adore how melodramatic Dick is being. And he knows he's being melodramatic, but he's being cockblocked by his own boyfriend, so he reserves the right to be a little annoyed.
And then there was an absolutely amazingly cutesy and so, so sweet little sex scene.
Oh, and by the way, I'm a sucker for romance. So injecting copious amounts of fluff into this was a major plus for me. Wally is so completely and utterly in love with Dick it's actually making me feel all warm and gooey inside. And I don't get mushy.
Thank you so much for filling this.
All that being said, I hope you wouldn't mind me telling you what I thought of the final scene. It was really sweet, and cute, and I loved it. But maybe you could watch out for some things in the future. For starters, try to avoid using the word 'groin' more than once. It's a correct term, but is way too... un-sexy to use during serious smut. That's the problem with most 'correct' terms. 'Crotch' is more acceptable, but again, if you're going to refer to their cocks, just say 'him' or 'them' most of the time. For example, instead of "Carefully, they coated the lube, fingers around Wally's -manhood- – together" try "Carefully, they coated the lube, fingers around -Wally- – together." If you're going to focus on romantic love-making over than dirty sex, this sounds... sweeter. If you must refer to the penis by word, use 'shaft' instead of 'cock'. Not saying don't use these words at all, just avoid them as much as you can. I know sometimes it's not possible. And maybe tone down on the moaning. Try exchanging them with groans and gasps and silence. Sometimes silence can be golden.
Also, it doesn't seem like they've ever been naked together, in a sexual situation, before. Since this is their first time, that's a little unrealistic. Taking it from my gay friends (I swear they started talking about their sex lives just to annoy me, but I'm pretty sure they regretted it when I got curious instead of grossed out), they all start with blowjobs, and this one extremely cute couple (who were pretty young when they got together) apparently just stared and (mostly) innocently touched each other the first time they got naked together. First time is never straight-up sex. Of course, this is a oneshot, and there are severe limitations on time-frames here. I would like to see something like this incorporated in 'Step by Step', though.
Another thing is, unless thoroughly distracted, first time penetration is very, very painful. And since Dick was the one doing the work and wasn't very distracted, he should have been in a bit more pain, or Wally should have been distracting him more. They're a little too in control of themselves for their first time, but that's just a minor detail. And it's rare that a guy comes without someone touching -him-, and only from stimulation to his prostrate. Things moved a tad bit too fast here, from beginning to end. Maybe next time you could take it slower? Give them more time to adjust and revel in each other?
I've probably said too much. I love this, I really, really do. But I kinda sorta want you to write the perfect scene for 'Step by Step', so... I hope you don't mind.
Thank you again. This was a wonderful read.