Reviews for And Then Another Day Began
andres chapter 17 . 8/12
are you going to continue to write
Guest chapter 17 . 3/1
I hope to see what happens in the next chapter.

Please continue with the story.
Frank chapter 17 . 10/21/2016
Please continue uploading this story. I enjoyed this series, although some things could use some improvement, like Jack and Renee could use some more action and such.
Shaz chapter 17 . 12/29/2015
Brilliant story. Such good writing. Have read all 4 parts and was gutted when I realised it wasn't finished. Please update. Thanks.
Anin chapter 1 . 12/17/2014
Please update this !
Anon chapter 1 . 11/3/2014
Please Update!
Guest chapter 17 . 8/6/2014
I liked this story so far. Jack and Renee we're the best. It was stupid that Renee was killed off on 24.

This villain Brendan Marson seems like a good villain. After he and his group seized the hospital, he violently told Audrey to shut up and killed three hostages in cold blood in the live feed to the White House in this chapter. And now at the end of it, he threatened to kill Audrey next and has the silent clock as the end of it, which means either Audrey's impending death or just to create tension like Renee's first silent clock when she was buried alive.

I may have not loved Audrey in the way I loved Renee as a character and as a partner and lover for Jack, but her death in LAD was ridiculous and the effects it did on Jack and Heller was hard to watch.

Keep on writing.
MarsStone chapter 17 . 8/6/2014
So far, this story is getting more intense like 24 always was.

The hospital takeover is intense and brutal.

From what I seeing, Jack is now back in action with Chloe on his side, like they normally do. Let's hope how he will do in the next chapter now that he, Chloe and two other agents have infiltrated the hospital. Morris revealing that Chloe is pregnant is an interesting twist for sure.

Renee has the right to be definitely concerned about Hayworth's leadership and his inability to handle the situation in the hospital, like she witnessed in season 7 of 24. there is some tension between Hayworth & some of the government officials, including Renee. I can see Heller is starting to have Alzheimer's like he had in LAD and his assistant is concerned about him.

I see that Jack loved Renee more than he did with Audrey, Jack does feel guilty over everything that happened to Audrey, which is why he is going to try to rescue her. Also, in LAD, Jack does feel a lot of guilt over Audrey, but I don't think he loved her in the same way anymore in that time.

Something's off about the death of that mole Brewer during the interrogation. I don't know why, but I have a feeling there is something off for reasons I don't want to spoiled it.

Brendan Marson looks like a ruthless, revenge-driven yet interesting villain who makes some interesting movie references in several key moments. He killed three hostages without any sign of remorse whatsoever and he also harshly confronted Audrey over her whining to silenced her. Also, his Die Hard reference is believable and funny, but this Russian didn't understand the reference.

Also, the silent clock with Audrey soft sobs over Marson's threatening to kill her seemed like the way the silent clock was used on David Palmer in season 2 and Renee in season 7.

Anyway, I hope to see the next chapter soon.
b3ta chapter 17 . 8/2/2014
woo hoo! another chapter! And a very good one! your writing is so good it actually helps me with my current 24 withdrawal sympthoms. I love how you portray Renee and how she feels about Audrey, I actually loved and mourned both characters. I'm sure Jack will save the day and happily marry in the end (right?) can't wait to read more!
DieHardBrendan chapter 17 . 8/1/2014
That was a very intense chapter and it was so 24 like.

Brendan sure is crazy and is determined to finish his sadistic agenda to kill President Taylor. He probably would've been a great 24 villain in real life. Brendan threatening Audrey seemed like any bad guy could do to Audrey.

Also, Brendan quoting John McClane was pretty funny and Andrian didn't get who he was since he despises American action movies.

Jack wants to be there to rescue Audrey, even though he doesn't love her anymore. His guilt over destroying Audrey's life is believable.

Renee seems to know the fact that Hayworth can't run any terrorist crisis because of his current state. She also concerned about Heller as well, giving the fact about him in 24:LAD.

Anyway, keep up the great work.
Maria chapter 16 . 7/16/2014
I love your story and I can't wait to see what happens with those remaining 8 episodes. When will you write chapter 17?
Marija chapter 4 . 6/26/2014
I absolutely love your story :) What I've read so far is amazing. It would have been wonderful if Renee had survived :) Thanks so much for writing this
Cole Ortiz chapter 3 . 5/22/2014
I actually laughed at the part where the Fat Russian is looking for food. That would never happen on the real show :) I wonder why he's never named but the image of a fat assassin actually is pretty funny even though this is a serious story.
Cole Ortiz chapter 2 . 5/22/2014
Another good chapter. I guess Stockard had been an important character in your universe if you gave her a silent clock here. To be honest I've never given a silent clock to any characters I've come up with and I've wrote a few full seasons with many new characters.

Now for constructive criticism, I think Lithuania wasn't the best choice since its in Eastern Europe and Kamistan is a Middle Eastern country I think a former Soviet republic like Azerbaijan, Georgia, Kazakhstan or Uzbekistan might make more sense since they border the Middle East. But I'm surprised you know so much about the US government.
Cole Ortiz chapter 1 . 5/19/2014
Ive never read any of your stories before but this is a great format! The only thing is that with this format with how you get into the characters thoughts, you can't really reveal anyone as a possible mole unless you ONLY do the thoughts of Jack alone cause he's the only one you know is good.

Also I haven't read any of your other did the second half of Season 8 not happen in your universe? With Renee, Pillar, Suvarov, Dana all alive?
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