| Reviews for The Master of Death |
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  Guest chapter 11 . 9/17/2013 Heck you don't mess around with your fight scenes. Epic! Thanks for the update. |
| Guest chapter 11 . 9/17/2013 thing anymore then they thing anymore than they [By the way, this is most gorgeous depictions of Fiendfyre I've ever seen. Nice job, the attention to detail is very appreciated.] And suddenly the water stopped passed through his gills. And suddenly the water stopped passing through his gills. he felt that he knew the fire was trying to do to him. he felt that he knew what the fire was trying to do to him. with the piranha's before with the piranhas before but there was only so pleasant having a malicious, sentient fire shoved into your head could get [Some odd grammar that needs changing] Harry attack them from the other side Harry attacked them from the other side the giant's city the giants' city [Though I guess you could be talking about that main giant.] dwarfish man was wielding a sword three times his side was fending off a creature dwarfish man wielding a sword three times his size was fending off a creature From the burning clouds slide a bright streak From the burning clouds slid a bright streak their moral and bloodlust doubled their morale and bloodlust doubled It was the later Harry focused on. It was the latter Harry focused on. by the fairies advance, by the fairies' advance, There were few prisoners I stole away There were a few prisoners I stole away [I think?] She sounded it amused She sounded amused OR She sounded as if amused though as he moved his bones peaked through [Slightly confusing, since at first read through, it appears as if you're saying "he moved his bones", not "as he moved, his bones peaked"] like a crown of like like a crown of light [?] The same voice as early murmured The same voice as earlier murmured what creatures mouth to imitate what creature's mouth to imitate Harry nodded minuscule at her words [Maybe an adverb instead of "minuscule"? Or reorganize the sentence.] all the managed was to compress them all he managed was to compress them Its light spelt through the murky veil [Not sure if spelt is the best word here Perhaps spilled?] If the him from a seventy years ago If the him from seventy years ago Ok, so this seriously was a beautiful chapter, and I felt the urge to beta it for typos/errors to prevent anything from detracting from this chapter's quality. I'm guessing I caught at least 75% of the errors. I'm not sure what kind of criticism you're looking, so if there's any specific feedback that you would want, just mention it. Cheers! |
 goddragonking chapter 11 . 9/17/2013 great ch and hope for more updates |
| adrian11 chapter 11 . 9/17/2013 This is the most awesome thing I've ever seen in a any Harry Potter fanfiction EVER |
| Star Dust of Ancient Novae chapter 11 . 9/17/2013 I'm thinking 'Burn' is a command phrase for a nuclear like blast. Big kaboom. |
| Sorrowful Stone chapter 11 . 9/17/2013 Hell yeah! Awesome fight scene. I liked all the introspection and learning more about the nature of fiendfyre. Someone should draw a picture of the end scene. It would be totally epic. |
| Deritine chapter 10 . 9/12/2013 This is hands down the absolute best rendition of Mater-of-Death!Harry. Period. I love it. I need more! I am a massive sucker for temporal paradoxes/loops/etc and I have a burning need to know why the beginning was how it was. I don't even care that it is so far from either canon lol. Usually that irritates me. But you've got like this Lovecraft-ian thing going and it's awesome. |
| Bobboky chapter 10 . 8/22/2013 Awesome |
| Mymalkshakes chapter 10 . 8/17/2013 Great chapter, Im really loving this story. You've also convinced me to go out and check out the Dresden files. Hopefully update soon! |
| Lord Blood chapter 10 . 8/13/2013 holy shit. i've never watched/read the dresden files, and my only exposure to the universe is pretty much what i've read from shezza and his denarian fics. but these last 2 chapters got the blood pumping. i really want to see more of these freakish and creepy ass giants and see just WTF is going on. |
| I-Am-Silence chapter 10 . 8/12/2013 Great Story! |
| Ragdain chapter 10 . 8/5/2013 SQUEEEEE! You have got to get the next chapter out! This is awesome. |
| Arafell chapter 10 . 8/2/2013 Underwater Fiendfyre - that's just epic. Also, time travel presents amusing opportunities to prank your future self. It'll be fun to see all the ripples from what Harry's doing. |
| BRMoreaux chapter 10 . 7/31/2013 Love the last line. |
| Dracomancer1 chapter 10 . 7/26/2013 Brain-bendingly send-all-semblances-of-reality-and-sanity-screamin g-for-momma awesome! |