|Reviews for The Hidden Man|
| Count Mallet chapter 5 . 2/16
When I read your story about the prosecution of Eureka the kitten, I though I might have partially read this story. Is it perhaps undergoing a rewrite now? I'll try to leave thoughts on the chapters so far rather than flooding you with multiple reviews at once.
I have to remind myself that the original Baum Books were written in the early 1900's. As such, a war with rifles and bayonets as the start would be very era-appropriate even if it would seem weird in today's times.
It's nice to see Jellia isn't intimidated by Oz's demands and mysterious persona. The start of chapter two reminds me of the movie scene where Toto pulls back the curtain to reveal the man controlling everything. In this instance, though, I imagine Oz's social graces and skills had wasted away with his reported 12 years of isolation. Interesting to see you tie in the land of Oz's past as reported in the books into Jellia's flashbacks/story.
I can only imagine the Wogglebug gasping in horror to hear how Jellia considered his kind to be nothing more than a household nuisance pest. I like the how the chess metaphor played out at the end and Jellia offers to be Oz's eyes & ears.
In chapter four, I didn't realize how territorial the citizens were about their colors. Family estrangement for mismatched socks... then again, I've seen sillier reasons for family fights. Looks like the chef is also cursed, possessed, or been replaced with a doppelganger.
Even more powerful in chapter five is the idea of colors cancelling out the evil magic, with green neutralizing all. A decent explanation for the required green spectacles in the original book and another good tie in to the Emerald City being the center of all magic.
I'm hoping that there will eventually be more. I'd like to see how this eventually ends.
- Count Mallet -
| WogglebugLoveProductions chapter 4 . 7/10/2013
Well... I at least I can't say I HADN'T given you a warning beforehand, you retarded old git! If am to be in any way responsible for any products I put out, then I can honestly say I can put one out in a way that will hurt you and I will NEVER regret doing so! You are about to become majorly unfavorable in the fan club that I am the founder and sole owner of!
| James Birdsong chapter 4 . 5/25/2013
Cool two chapters. Excellent story.
| James Birdsong chapter 2 . 3/2/2012
| An Atheist Avenging Her Rights chapter 2 . 2/20/2012
Another completely awesome chapter. I loved how the flashback scene was neatly interspersed with the present scene of Jelia telling the Wogglebug about it. And at the end I could clearly see a glimpse of a relationship beginning between Jelia and the Wizard. And so now I am more eager than before for the next chapter to come.
| An Atheist Avenging Her Rights chapter 1 . 1/27/2012
Awesome beginning. I assume the opening sequence was of a flashback of the Wizard being in the Civil War or something. And I overall love the flow of of how Jelia tells of her story from the beginning so far. And I'm excited to read the next chapter when I presume Jelia will actually be meeting with the Wizard in person for the first time. I also hope the Wogglebug's study goes well overall. He's like me, and loves a real good challenge at what he likes to do best.