|Reviews for Sith Code|
| Zero The Grimm chapter 8 . 1/30
Reading these chapters of Yoko is always fun. With the addition of Vetter and Jaesa as her lovers, it became more so. Writing with Yoko starting to care a bit more openly was nice. Funny to with this chapter.
I am interested to see about Yoko and if she will get robotic arm replacements. Think there is potential there about her not being able to feel her two loves like she once did. Though I did feel the arms being cut off was a bit sudden and more reaction and time needed to be added to it.
This chapter is noticeably smaller then others so I think there was a lot of room to add that length of time and in some other scenes too.
I like your yoko series. Still do, just feel like some passion in this has diminished a little.
| SarahTaylorTam chapter 8 . 12/27/2017
Oohh I wonder how she will adapt she won't be able to touch and then feel them anymore, this was good can't wait to see where you take this keep up the good work.
| Imouto's mad house chapter 8 . 12/24/2017
But why is he so happy that she's not a threat? Robotic limb replacement is a thing in star wars. And she just slaughtered them without her arms, so she's clearly still a very dangerous threat. All he's done is delay any destruction she may cause, and as far as he knows he's only pissed her off even more and made her more vicious for when she gets those new synthetic limbs. So why does he think he is in any way victorious?
Good chapter though.
| Boris Yeltsin chapter 8 . 12/22/2017
Keep it up when you can. Sorry things got in the way for you.
| march4fun chapter 8 . 12/22/2017
Holy crap, it returns!
Really glad to see you back. Loved the lovers' fluff and the awesome fight scene. Looking forward to more, whenever it comes.
| Dude chapter 1 . 9/30/2016
the Story is awesome...
That awesome that i would like to ask you to add a few Chapters...maybe withe the cool Inquisitor from the beginning some more great Fight/Destruction flow/rage...and kuddle Happy Ending...
Ps: My Sith Assasin is a red skinned female Twi'lek too...with those cool Tattoos and brown eyes...
Ps: My Sith Assasin is a Red skimned Twi'lek too also with that cool Tattoos but withourt that
| Enzo the husky chapter 1 . 8/27/2016
I really did not like this for some reason I don't I don't now why I won't to like but I can't im a big star wars fan but there are flaws in the story that just can't make the cut of you like this good for you I don't care this my opion so don't get you panties in a twist.
Stay awesome everyone this is Enzo sighing out
| Just a Crazy-Man chapter 7 . 8/9/2016
Lov oh lov.
| The Fox Familiar chapter 7 . 5/31/2016
I enjoyed this chapter.
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/1/2016
| Plebian chapter 7 . 11/16/2015
I really enjoy your stories and see how rarely it is you post nowadays, so if you see this please continue posting on this story and others. 8 really would like to see how if at all this tolls into "Peace is a Lie"
| The Fox Familiar chapter 7 . 9/2/2015
Chapters 1 – 7
Look what we have here. Instead of the usual horny teenage girl or young adult idiot writing slash, we have a teenage boy or young adult writing femslash. My, my. Have difficulties with the female sex? Well, you’re about to be schooled by a fine member of that side of the spectrum. Are you ready, little boy?
First of all, you are idiotic enough not to know the difference between your and you’re. That said, let’s have an example:
“Get your ass over there, woman.”
“You’re a terrible cook, woman. Go back and make me a sandwich!”
So we have a Sith character who in a spectacular fit of fail, brought along a mouthy Twi’lek because the bitch put out and she couldn’t resist. Yes, this is how all lesbians act. BTW, did you know over 90% of them are morbidly obese? Some food for thought. Then, she fights some horrendously cliched villains, all who sound like they need to go to a hooker bar and score.
“You dumb nerfs” – HAHAHAHA OH WOW.
This didn’t take long, because none of these chapters are edited and you honestly think that you’re writing well. Since you’re asking for reviews, I’ll be pleased to give them.
For one: all of your female characters are either men in disguise, or are sluts. They have no personality and just want to have sex with your –ahem- self insert, because you can’t get it in real life. Yoko, a rather typical Japanese name, is a Sith, and that’s it. She wears heavy black boots, has all these conflicting emotions about ‘protecting her loves’, which is really what a man does. So your insert is just protecting the Mary-Sues that are too dumb to defend themselves. She does the dumbest things; hell, she just brought the sexy blue Waifu along because she had vital information, when the Sith would really just snatch the information out of them via a thing called interrogation and leave her corpse cooling on the pavement. But no. Yoko needs a Blue Waifu because of Reasons, and because the author thinks carpet munchers are awesome. OK, dude, go back to watching the real porn and leave us normal people alone, OK?
Not every day we get a dude who likes Twilight. I think that’s testament to your tastes, don’t you agree?
It’s clear you like TL;DR about women who are trying too hard to be men and go ‘Muh Feels’ towards other chicks. While it’s not as sexually violent or graphic as, say, male slash stories, it’s still bad because whether you want to admit it or not: true lesbianism doesn’t exist in humans, and these chicks would just simulate sex with a phallus. Does Yoko’s lightsaber serve as a strap-on? I mean, after fighting the Republic and being a wannabe badass – AKA Mary Sue – she’s gotta have the clichéd story where two women fall in love with her.
No, that certainly does NOT sound like a woman wrote it. Add on that you’re a dude. I can’t tell.
Your writing is very female centric and it’s hard to believe this takes place in Star Wars. It shares the name and locations, but not the spirit. You’re just writing bad femslash because, again, you can’t get the attention of the female sex. What you are going to get, though, is a flame.
You’re a pretty bad writer. If your work made me roll my eyes, made me want to take a nailgun to your characters, and most of all, insulted my intelligence, then your work needs to be incinerated. It seems you’re trying to emulate your favourite authors and their works, but even then, theirs is just TL;DR of carpet munchers talking end over end about their feelings. No one cares.
You also make other femslash pairings that really don’t make sense: Zoey and the Witch? The Witch is a mutated human, you dumbass. She’s going to kill anyone that gets near her. The Green Flu mutated humans to where they have no more humanity. It’s just as bad as HunterxFemOC fics.
Word of advice? Maybe look up what happens in real lesbian sex, as well as a thing called ‘Blue Waffle Syndrome’. Yeah. Crushes your dreams, doesn’t it?
Obviously, talent isn't your forte. And neither is staying true to canon or writing things that people care about. With the grade-school grammar and syntax, and the even more immature plot and writing style, it's clear that you have no idea about anything, ever, and just want to read two girls with no personalities have sex.
I'll be amazing if you really turn out to be a guy. Really. Because everything here stinks of female-centrism, and has all the earmarks of female writing. And, like female writing: it sucks. Too bad, so sad.
| Zero The Grimm chapter 7 . 8/20/2015
Ah, just keeps getting better and better. I feel your pain of the lazies...
| af10573 chapter 7 . 8/18/2015
This was a good update expeacilly the work in of Cipher 9 keep it up
| Mastermind4892 chapter 7 . 8/18/2015
Fantastic to see another chapter!
And Irie'na? I'm so grateful!