|Reviews for Raven's Titans|
| KaixShadowBane chapter 2 . 4/28/2013
ANother great story Love more updates.
| godzillafan1 chapter 2 . 3/31/2013
hmm naruto x raven x starfire i like that idea write the next chapter as soon as you can please.
| CelticReaper chapter 2 . 8/20/2012
update soon please
| Bladre MKT chapter 2 . 7/10/2012
oooook wah? um this seems like a nice diea but i need more for stating a good vote XD
| Already-Lost-It chapter 2 . 6/6/2012
Looks pretty good. I like how your keeping everything smooth and focused. Keep up the good work.
Toll next time.
| Chargone chapter 1 . 5/19/2012
however good the story may be, your writing has issues. given what those issues Are, i think i've reviewed some of your other work before ( i don't really keep track.) this isn't flamey trolliness, this is stuff you actually need to work on to make your works readable. i've always been baffled by people who read poorly writen fics (often Far worse than this) and then somehow gush over how great it is in reviews... 'you didn't form a single coherant sentence but i don't care your fic is awesome yay!' sort of thing. you're not That bad *laughs* but still, there are issues which you really need to work on, as currently you'll probably be loosing a lot of readers (including me) on chapter one due simply to how much effort it takes to read past the grammatical errors. (also, general rule, though not 100% accurate: if the grammar is terrible odds are good the author's not putting a whole lot of effort into the characterization or plot either. that bit of logic will lose you readers too)
so, in the interests of helping you out, i present the following:
step one to improving your writing:
every time you get the urge to write 'that of': don't. (you keep using it in places where 'of' might fit and nothing is necessary)
step two is keeping your tenses straight. (you're not too bad at this one, actually, i've seen much, much worse, but it's basic enough that if it's coming up at all, avoiding it has high priority)
step three would be making sure you actually use punctuation when and as appropriate. (mostly fine, but where it's wrong/missing it's really bad)
four would be your prepositions. not that i've yet found a good resource for listing them and telling you what each one does and doesn't do, but you misuse them a fair bit.
also: 'whom': this word is actually archaic, you can use 'who' in all slots without issue. but if you're Going to use 'whom' make sure you get it right. properly speaking it is used whenever you would use 'who' but are talking about the object of the sentence rather than the subject... but in reality it normally only shows up as part of set phrases ('to whom it may concern', for example) and when this is not the case the sentence structure is usually modified around it (not to mention english prefers, at least for queries, to arrange itself to avoid Needing whom. 'to whom did you give it?' will rearrange to 'who did you give it to?'. 'whom' also generally takes prepositions, rather than 'who' which is fine with post-positions (these are the same words in english, but the former go before the noun the deal with and the latter after. english also calls them all 'prepositions' reguardless)
anyway, hopefully this is helpful (and actually taken on board and made use of. won't help anyone if ignored, obviously) and i don't get some random idiot jumping down my throat for daring to point out the flaws in an author's writing ... that's happened before...
| ScorpinokXV chapter 2 . 3/25/2012
This story has a lot of potential, and not having Robin now Nightwing in the lineup I haven't seen done before. ()
Raven as the team leader should be good. Being in such a position will get her out of her funk and force her to face her different emotions faster than those events in canon. :)
There's a lot of possibilities now that the Teen Titans has a new leader. I can see Raven with her analytical mind picking Titans who would work well in a group, and those who can leave their egos at the door and be real team players. ()
I'd like to vote for the following characters to be added to Raven's Teen Titans roster:
Ability to shrink in size
Formidable will granting resistance to regular mind control powers,
Proficient hand-to-hand combat skills,
Capability to let electricity travel through body without getting shocked
Enhanced Strength and Agility, Advanced Martial Arts Skill, Skilled Swordsman
Advanced Martial Arts Skill,
Enhanced Speed, Invisibility
Durability and Endurance
Heat Touch ('The Panther's Claw')
Más y Menos:
Super Speed In Contact With Each Other
Ability to fluently comprehend English
Add these members with Naruto, Raven, and Starfire and they should be able to handle themselves with the Villains of Jump City and menaces beyond.
and I'm looking forward to your next update. ()
| Blackholelord chapter 2 . 3/24/2012
Looks nice, a few more chapter to give a better review.
| Black Ace 0 chapter 1 . 2/9/2012
good so far.
Please update soon.
| fusioninferno chapter 1 . 2/2/2012
Can't wait to read more in the near future! )
| naruchan84 chapter 1 . 2/2/2012
looks good with raven createing a team cant wait to see how naruto got to the world good luck ja ne
| The Red Star chapter 1 . 1/31/2012
Very interesting set-up. I have a feeling that I know who the first person Raven recruited is, and I'm honestly amazed that no one who's reviewed this has caught on to who.
Like with your Naruto/Jackie Chan Adventures story, this feels more like a preview, so I hope you update this soon. I can't wait to see what's going to happen.
Forever in the Sky,
The Red Star
| Urahara144 chapter 1 . 1/31/2012
Interesting idea for an AU plot and can't wait to see what else happens down the road without Robin being the leader.
| NeonZangetsu chapter 1 . 1/31/2012
Hey, not bad! But why so SHORT? You should at least have Naruto pop up in the first chappy! That would give it way more oomph! I like where you're coming from though. I take it Naruto will serve as Robin's replacement? That'll be good to see. I never really liked Robin. Oh, and BTW I did get ur message. I will update my stories at my own leisure and when my healt permits it, so thanks for ur concern, my friend D
Keep it rocking,
| Srsly chapter 1 . 1/31/2012
I'm confused. This Koriand'r person IS Starfire, yes? And why would Robin just skip over Jump City? I know this is an AU, but meh. I've seen Teen Titans before so I guess tis a fresh origin point for u and that is always good to see.
And why oh why oh WHY did u not have Naruto in the first chappy? That would have been WAAAAAAAY more appealing! But hey, it is ur story. Hell, maybe you could write a NarutoxBlackfire fic? I'd srsly love to read one of those and so would several other authors I know!
Ah, but I'm rambling again!
Back to watching American Pickers! D