err "No One"-san, JUST SHUT THE HELL UP. Don't read if you don't like YAOI. You're stupid. You shouldn't review if you don't like yaoi. Duh.

DON'T WRITE ANY MORE YAOI,or anything like it.

The moment I saw the line 'till the day I die', I knew where you got it. When I was eight I had three copies of that movie bought because I watched then all so much they broke. I think your story is completely awesome! Can't wait until I read another of your stories!

I liked ths alot. It brot tears to my eyes.

cool, that was nicely done. :)

yes it was very good. continue!continue!continue!continue!please!please!please!please! thank you

ya need ta make a sequel. ya know with them meeting again and stuff.

uupddate XD

O_O Um... very weird. If not for the fact that I know this is supposed to be a YYH fic, I would ask who the characters were. I can't really find one specific thing wrong with this fic without sounding like a nitpicker, but it's just... weird.

This story was ok. Keep up the good work.

To me3gogi: Arigato! _ I know, I know. I actually wrote this when I was 11. :P And when I re-read it, boy, it sucked! I'm really planning to edit this and change the crappy summary. Help me? _ hehehe... So anyway, thanks for the c&c!

To minna-san: Thanks for the comments and suggestions. It's okay, if you hate my story. _ (I hate it myself) Uh... you don't have to write: WOW! THIS STORY IS GOOD when inside you say, YUCK! Heeheehee! It is extremely helpful to use this oppurtunity to comment on an aspect of my story that can be improved. A well-rounded critique is often the most rewarding tool for the writer like me. *looks down*

Oh well... thanks again, minna.

Ja

Miyuki

hmm. its a good idea, and u wrote it out well. the ending was really sweet, but sad. from ur choices, i would pick bad, poor and ugly.

nah, i dont mean that. good and what.

what is: nice. sweet, though sad, though _slightly

_ OOC with both kurama and yuusuke. note that its only slight, though some ppl may say thats its mroe than slight, i think u convayed them well. i dont know what botan is like that much, so i cant comment on her.

ok - constructive critisism.

THIS IS NOT MEANT AS A FLAME!

if u take it that way though, plz dont blame it on me, im taking time to write this to u to help u try and improve ur style. though if u ever tried to read anything of mine, u would see that im writing this from a hypocritical point of view.

ok - u should seperate the lines - when a different person speaks, or u start a different subject, go onto a new line, so its less confusing.

ur writing was also condensed, as the sentances were shortened, telling only the story rather than extra detail. you should set the scene, and maybe include some of kurama's thoughts, (i say kurama rather than the others) as its from his point of view. dont just say what he is thinking, like u have done, ('he had thought that that was yuusuke') but write it as if hes saying to himself in his head (/i had thought that that was yuusuke/).

as i said, without this, it kinda made the sentances short and kinda simplistic, just add a bit of detail, like what hes looking at, and what the stuff around him looks like.

like when he was in class, u said that the sensi looked their age, though he was only 27, say what he looked like (i dont know, so im making it up as i go along. sorry for the shit example, but its what i can come up with right now. its kinda late and im tired.), eg.

He had dark brown messy hair, his face was thin, his eyes a light warm brow, and he had a thin, lean body...

then, add more detail, elaborate. though the above is informative, its better with more detail. more interesting and engaging, making more ppl stay to read ur fic, eg, below;

his dark brown hair, though messy, made him look cute. it softened the thin sharp lines of his face, and framed his light, warm brown eyes. his lean body increased the effect of his young looking age, with narrow hips and long legs...

but, though i probs do it, dont put in too much detail. that makes it tedious to plough through detail, trying to get to what is actually happening. lots of ppl do this, in varying degrees. but lots of ppl do the opposite, in varying degrees again, like u did.

if uve actually read this, and not sent an e-mail flame back to me saying i have no right to critisize ur writing (u would be right too) then, good luck with ur ideas, and happy writing.

nice! i think, i'm starting to like yusuke/kurama couple. more stories of them!

Kurama was really kind of ooc here, just as you warned..I liked the way Botan and kurama treat each other

but it was kind of weird at the part where Kurama asked Yusuke about his feelings. Good plot, I probably just don't like the pairings..owee..

Just a bit rushed, but if you did take it slower I think it'd be nice. Keep writing!