I really like your novel the only thing that bothered me is the overuse of flashback.

I believe it is canon that the Potters and Longbottoms are related, with one of Neville's direct ancestors having been a daughter of Potter who married into the family. Thus if bloodline is the criteria for drawing the Sword of Gryffindor then Neville could do so as well.

personal opinion on Ravenclaw is that it has BECOME more associated with booksmarts, just as Slytherin has BECOME associated with pureblood supremacists, and Gryffindor is reckless bravado. The INTENT for each being Ravenclaw for Intelligence, Wit, Innovation, and a certain Eccentricity of thought (of which Luna is a prime exampleSlytherin for Ambition, Cunning, Planning/Plotting, and lofty Aspirations; Gryffindor for Bravery, Honor, Chivalry, and Self-discipline. Hufflepuff is seen negatively as being for the "duffers" or dregs, and positively for the Hardworking, Loyal, and Trustworthy; however, I think it was really meant for those who fit two or even all three of the other houses to such degree that a sorting to any one would actually be detrimental, as well as those that Don't fit any of the other three: the Loyalty and Hardwork are more so what they Learn in the house Because they are looked down on- they both have to stick together and support one another and need to work hard to prove their worth over the preconceived opinions others have for their house.

A brilliant story, one of the best h/hr stories I’ve read. Will definitely be reading this again in the

Gave up on reading this as soon as Harry and Hermione were sorted. They have shown 0 traits with Gryffindor so far, and all they have talked about is learning. Hermione saying Harry told her about 'Not learning for learning sake' Is a obvious excuse for lazy writing and a horrible excuse at that.

Serious issues keeping the tense consistent. Is this supposed to be past or present tense? Further editing is required.

A very interesting read. I greatly enjoyed it. I understood the science stuff much better than the story where petunia marries a biochemist and raises Harry as her own. That one made me feel absolutely stupid not knowing a single science thing they said. Aside from several grammatical errors and confusion, this was definitely a good story.

I really enjoy reading the well thought out theories of the spells and charms in this story.

“…forcefully put her finger on his mouth.” Realistically, I can see someone clamping their hand on someone’s mouth to stop them from talking but putting just a single finger on their mouth though? I’m pretty sure if anyone did that to another person, no matter how close in relationship they are, will be seen with a broken finger.

Why the hell is it that when he's talking to other professors or thinking in his own head, he refers to Harry as 'Mr. Potter', but whenever he actually talks to Harry he is overly familiar; and no one thinks to question that?

Because its creepy as all hell.

Neither Harry nor Hermione have had a real/healthy friendship before this, so how can they so quickly accelerate into a romantic relationship?

I know it's not unheard of for younger children to decide that they're together, but that's usually children who've had friendships in the past; and there's usually no actual substance to the relationship. Neither of which applies to this situation.

You should've just left the hat's reasoning for putting them in Gryffindor vague and undefined; because the reasons you gave were absolutely pathetic.

Literally every other house works better for them than Gryffindor, given how they've been set up in the past five chapters. Slytherin due to their ambition and/or cunning, Ravenclaw due to their desire for knowledge and study habits, Hufflepuff due to their hardworking attitude and desire to improve society.

They don't fit in Gryffindor at all.

Macnair, McNair… does not really matter but pick one and stick to it. Makes you look incredibly stupid when you keep changing back and forth, even within a single small paragraph. Closer proofreading is definitely required.

You also have a huge problem keeping your tense consistent. You regularly insert present tense verbs where you need the past tense. Again, more proofreading required.

Loved it

This… is really not that good. I don’t understand how it’s so successful