A brilliant story, one of the best h/hr stories I’ve read. Will definitely be reading this again in the

Gave up on reading this as soon as Harry and Hermione were sorted. They have shown 0 traits with Gryffindor so far, and all they have talked about is learning. Hermione saying Harry told her about 'Not learning for learning sake' Is a obvious excuse for lazy writing and a horrible excuse at that.

Serious issues keeping the tense consistent. Is this supposed to be past or present tense? Further editing is required.

A very interesting read. I greatly enjoyed it. I understood the science stuff much better than the story where petunia marries a biochemist and raises Harry as her own. That one made me feel absolutely stupid not knowing a single science thing they said. Aside from several grammatical errors and confusion, this was definitely a good story.

I really enjoy reading the well thought out theories of the spells and charms in this story.

“…forcefully put her finger on his mouth.” Realistically, I can see someone clamping their hand on someone’s mouth to stop them from talking but putting just a single finger on their mouth though? I’m pretty sure if anyone did that to another person, no matter how close in relationship they are, will be seen with a broken finger.

Why the hell is it that when he's talking to other professors or thinking in his own head, he refers to Harry as 'Mr. Potter', but whenever he actually talks to Harry he is overly familiar; and no one thinks to question that?

Because its creepy as all hell.

Neither Harry nor Hermione have had a real/healthy friendship before this, so how can they so quickly accelerate into a romantic relationship?

I know it's not unheard of for younger children to decide that they're together, but that's usually children who've had friendships in the past; and there's usually no actual substance to the relationship. Neither of which applies to this situation.

You should've just left the hat's reasoning for putting them in Gryffindor vague and undefined; because the reasons you gave were absolutely pathetic.

Literally every other house works better for them than Gryffindor, given how they've been set up in the past five chapters. Slytherin due to their ambition and/or cunning, Ravenclaw due to their desire for knowledge and study habits, Hufflepuff due to their hardworking attitude and desire to improve society.

They don't fit in Gryffindor at all.

Macnair, McNair… does not really matter but pick one and stick to it. Makes you look incredibly stupid when you keep changing back and forth, even within a single small paragraph. Closer proofreading is definitely required.

You also have a huge problem keeping your tense consistent. You regularly insert present tense verbs where you need the past tense. Again, more proofreading required.

Loved it

This… is really not that good. I don’t understand how it’s so successful

nice

Why didn’t the hat or Phoenix tell him about the one on his scar?

I thought Hermione and Harry were going to get inheritance tests?