Really author?No hay problema. No problem: in Spanish)
Harry replied unconsciously skipping into Spanish.]

There are many problems with what was written here, not just the improper grammar in both English and Spanish, but also how you made no hint to how Harry can speak multiple languages earlier.

Also, he lives in Britain! How would he unconsciously slip into Spanish? English is the predominant language in Britain! I doubt that Harry would use Spanish so regularly that he would actually unconsciously speak it in a conversation between other English speaking people!

There’s no problem with wanting to make your character look smart or any number of positive things, but just the way you did it like this feels like you’re writing a Gary Stu, or just obnoxiously showing off. It’s just so terribly done I can’t help but wonder if you actually thought this looked good.

Really boring introduction. You’re rushing through the exposition, barely have any dialogue, descriptions of places that Harry/Hermione are aren’t described... this really all just adds up to a bland beginning. Which anyone who has gone through primary school should know is bad, as the opening is where you try to grab a readers attention.

You seem to not really get this and just gloss over these things which makes for a boring read. Two chapters of this is enough for most people to not want to bother reading.

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Sorry about the earlier comment I did not read 2nd chapter before commenting

Usually hermione is older than everyone else in her class by 1 year since her birthday is in september by the time her classes properly start she is older

Your statement, "when the universe began, it was hypothesized there was nothing but energy," is incorrect, though most people think the Big Bang had something at the start, such as energy, a 'hot, dense state,' like the TV show says, or something.
The actual Big Bang theory states that NOTHING existed before - no empty space even. Nothing.
Then all of a sudden a singularity came into existence from NOTHING and in it was everything that now compromises everything in the universe. Except no one can tell you what a singularity actually is or how it did all this. It is total speculation with no scientific evidence to it.
Also, NOTHING 'caused' the singularity to come into being - no God-like entity or intelligence caused it.

Nothing caused everything. Is that logical to you?

If your intelligence and common sense tells you that makes NO SENSE whatsoever, trust your intelligence and common sense over any scientist that says otherwise.

No experiment can be performed to prove what happened in the past, not even what happened yesterday. A video of what you did yesterday is not scientific evidence, it is historical evidence.

Now here is what is really controversial. There is more historical evidence, though inconclusive, for a God created earth six thousand years ago than there is for the Big Bang.

I really wish you would put O.W.L. instead of O and N.E.W.T. instead of N.E. is is confusing especially with the first since O is also a grade used in the series. it makes it look like Ordinary and Nastily Exhausting are the names of the tests instead of the full names.

I just realized Daniel and Emma Granger A.K.A. Daniel Radcliffe and Emma Watson. I feel so stupid now

Great story

I like this story for the most part but these first chapters have just been "here, look at how smart Harry and Hermione are". That gets boring pretty quickly.

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why would harry be scared of womens liberation in the wizarding world