Reviews for Counted Among the Traitors
Guest chapter 21 . 8/16
This might be one of my favorite fanfics on the whole website. It was so beautiful and deep and tore at my heart in so many ways. During the scene where Edmund is in the jail cell, especially, I had to put the book down for a bit and read passages from Psalms and Job and Hosea 6:1-3 before I could read on.

My one issue is that, a few times (bother, I can't find a specific instance now, but I know I saw it at least twice), you refer to Edmund's good actions since his betrayal as him making "atonement". I guess the wording just sort of bothered me,
Blackwind137 chapter 9 . 7/26
I so caLLeD IT. Hell naw, ahhhhh.. My heart. Meh heart... Thank you for King Lune, bless his heart
Blackwind137 chapter 8 . 7/24
I just KNOW Gil is bad news! Like, Peter- bannishment, c'mon. It's your brother! You can't just not trust him! Agh...I am enjoying it so far, and beautiful job up to now and beyond, I am sure. You certainly know how to write something to make a reader cringe- I like~.
Blackwind137 chapter 5 . 7/24
I don't like where this is going, but I don't trust that Gil guy one bit. Not one. Bit. But I truly am enjoying this very much~.
thebeautifulbicky chapter 21 . 4/30
What an amazing story.

I love all the Christian elements you've brought into it - how Jesus has chosen us, how Jesus has forgiven us, and how Jesus loves us beyond anything else. I love how you put any worldly paradigms into perspective - that we really only need to lean on Jesus and we don't need to run Narnia perfectly or whatever.

Awesome character development, especially with Susan and how she gradually fell for Gildrey's deceptions. And of course awesome character development for Ed - you really emphasised how Aslan's redeeming blood had washed his character from a traitor to a king. It was awesome.

One thing I would've liked perhaps is a bit more doubt at the beginning. It would've been good if you had the readers second-guessing Ed, and made them think he was actually a traitor. And also make readers second-guess Aslan. And then when you make it clear that it's Gilfrey who's the traitor, it'll make the readers realise how stupid they were for ever doubting Aslan.
Just a thought.

In any case, fantabulous story. I haven't read such a good fanfiction for a veeeery long time. Good job.
Nicky Gabriel chapter 21 . 3/22
Hallo!
That was the most heartbreaking and beautiful story I have ever read.
I don’t know how you are doing it, but all the cliffhangers made me want to scream and you surprised me every time I thought I was ready to expect the unexpected. You are truly amazing writer.
My favorite character here was Edmund (of course, because he is always my favorite one) and you wrote him exactly as I love to read about him. I love how insecure he felt when he heard the prophecy, I love how he accepted everything what Peter decided and yet tried to save him anyway. And his conversations with Aslan were the most inspiring (again my favorite one was the talk they had about the prophecy. I just wanted to hug Edmund, even though I know he wouldn’t appreciate it.
But what you made him do on the top of the mountain was cruel, you know? :) I love such dilemmas and choices, especially so well written! I really wasn’t sure what he would decide and I was so happy when he did what he did. You must really like him, to put him through such horrible things!
It was a truly beautiful story! Thank you for sharing!
Nicky
Agent Oceania chapter 21 . 3/12
Love it
:D
Agent Oceania chapter 18 . 3/12
Oh no
Agent Oceania chapter 14 . 3/12
No, she wouldn't.
She did, that hag *growls*
Agent Oceania chapter 5 . 3/12
That's creepy...
GreenHorn22 chapter 21 . 2/16
Thjs was the first Narnia story I have read and I must say itwas wonderful. I loved how you kept the plot flowing without constantly going back and showing the same scene through three different ponts of views.I am excited to see what other Narnia stories are out there and I think they will be hard pressed to beat your story.
stephany.martin.503 chapter 21 . 9/22/2014
wow i love this story
pinksugarrush chapter 9 . 8/31/2014
Yayyy! So now we know what's causing Peter to be so easily lead astray! Good! It makes me so sad when Peter blames Edmund and accuse him as being a traitor!

I love it so far! :)
nicoliorox123 chapter 21 . 8/25/2014
This is a truly amazing story. You had me in tears most of the time, and I really wish I could write as well as you. Obviously, this is one of the stories I am going to read again. I love your portrayal of all the characters, and the addition of the White Witch. It was nicely paced, and if this was ever a movie, I'd definitely be one of the first to watch. Overall, amazing story!
Guest chapter 21 . 7/12/2014
i love it!
extremely well written...its just great...
i don't cry easily but i did when i read this...its the work of a genius. i'd love to read the companion pieces too, i'm sure they will be great.
thanks for the lovely fic, i love you. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
and lastly, pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease write some more peter/edmund brother fics, i love them. thanks a lot, i might join fanfiction some day cause i love the way it works and am a regular visitor and you guys sound real supportive but i don't consider myself much of an authoress.
ps- the trailors were great. i'll watch out for new fics
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