Terrific!

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Creative story!

Arthur is terrific here. When the chips are down we know who runs the family. It is Arthur.

I think Madame Delacour is going to get a conversation she would rather not have.

Telling the goblins about Harry's abuse might help. Excellent story!

Some people don't seem to know where their authority/power ends at.

I would love to see what you write next. Your a great writer and your stories are great too. I hope you keep up your great work.

Thank you,

Terri

Are you going to be continuing this story? If not do you know any others like it?

This is a cute story. I like the way it is developing and I'm not a Dumbledore fan.
Do you have a beta to check over your spelling and grammar?
There are some mistakes that really take away from an otherwise enjoyable story.
Allot - this means to make an allotment. When using it in place of "many" it is "a lot", two words.
Your/You're and to/too.
Newlywed is one word.
There are some run on and incomplete sentences.
Please understand that this is purely constructive criticism.
I really am enjoying this story and simply want to make suggestions that would improve it.

I was just rereading your story and was reminded of how much I was enjoying it. I think you have an interesting story idea and I live your characterizations of Harry and Ginny. I notice it's been over a year since your last update, though. I hope you get a chance to return to thus story and complete it. I think its much too good to be left unfinished

Pretty please update soon! :)

is this to be continued or is it finished? and also this is really good. If you are taking surgestions i would like to see bill or lupin find them. fiery confrontations are always interesting to see with ginny in them. :)

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