|Reviews for The Murphy Law|
| AKAAkira chapter 1 . 4/7/2012
Gaelic mythology, duh. Keep the 1k though, that's not too much.
You might want to first explain away Nuadha, though, same way as you did Terra. I've no idea how far you've gone in the Mabinogi storyline, but he does turn bad, so you might want to establish somewhere whether this takes place in that past, or if this takes place in a "parallel world" kinda situation.
Formatting-wise, keep in mind the grammar rules. If a dialogue is said before a directive ("he said", "she asked") the directive's first word is not capitalized. If a dialogue is said before a complete sentence, dialogue ends in period and the sentence's first word is capitalized.
And finally, I'm thinking your inclusion of Eabha as a god and Lugh's mention as a god of light was taken from reading the wiki...? There's a pretty big dispute about that going on right now. For the record, Lugh and Eabha's very likely NOT a god. 'Course, a bit late to say now, after that piece of misinformation, but still...good to know?
| herooftme chapter 1 . 2/8/2012
im one of the five , bte nice one dracielle :D