|Reviews for Time for Sorrows|
| F Maurice chapter 1 . 12/14/2013
| princessofthescoundrels chapter 1 . 9/18/2012
I like this a lot. It's very her, and very different from the other angsyish Leia fics I've read. Thank you!
| Jared C. Phillips chapter 1 . 2/7/2012
You are so in the vein. my best advice. edit edit edit until it hurts. Do you play chess? mt metaphor is this..."Pawns are powerful pieces despite thier size and moblity, (thier)either stubbon and in the way, (they are)or bridges to the next attack"... Treat words such as 'and' 'then' 'however' 'their' as such, using the words sparingly as much as possible. read the sentence again with and without the perenth's and you may see the words can soften the effect or give a more direct and powerful meaning.
Again, Great stuff!
I have not (much) room to judge, only to pass on what I know.(as) My first piece of work ever (was) just published here a few hours ago, 'The Myth of the Crystal Moon' Tell me what you think.
Jared C. Phillips