|Reviews for Only In Cards|
| mangoshake24 chapter 2 . 10/31/2012
please update as soon as possibe so i may enjoy your lovely story :D
| Guest chapter 2 . 9/28/2012
CONTINUE please! i'm dying from curiosity T.T
| Platinum Trickster chapter 2 . 5/22/2012
Dude... you DID get my revised chapters, right?
| Platinum Trickster chapter 1 . 4/6/2012
This is an interesting fic (oh hai ROT! I told you I'd check out your fic lol) but... it has just one grammar issue.
You're missing punctuation when the people speak a lot.
I mean, for example, here's a little exerpt from the first chapter:
The Jacks eyes softened "Yes, we will go choose and find this boy shall we not?" he asked with a glint of mischief. The Queen nodded in silent agreement "Let us be on our way" she said and with that the two of them were off.
It should be:
Then Jack's eyes softened. "Yes, we will go choose and find this boy shall we not?" he asked with a glint of mischief. The Queen nodded in silent agreement. "Let us be on our way." she said, and with that the two of them were off.
I might be nitpicking, but stuff like that just always bugged me.
Otherwise it's good.
| OmgPandi chapter 1 . 3/9/2012
This is really good so far! A little fast pace, but good! I can't wait to see if more is on the way! 3
| Sherlock Watson Holmes chapter 1 . 2/11/2012
xD I like where this is going, but be careful about going to fast.
:D I can't wait to see how you improve.