|Reviews for Italian?|
| LilyYumikoRockMe chapter 1 . 3/5
| Jenn chapter 1 . 2/9/2012
There are some spelling and punctuation errors.
Other than that, it's really sweet. I like Sherlock being sneaky.
| Hooper chapter 1 . 2/8/2012
This would make a very good outline. I like the idea, Sherlock takes John on a date to relieve boredom, good. I think the addition of Sherlock's thought process would help to transition from his childlike fit to a thoughtful date. Perhaps in Sherlock's mind it could be a sort of social experiment.
The grammar really needs fixing, but if that's not your area find someone to beta this for you.
I think with some rewrites this could really go somewhere, not bad for a first attempt!
| DancingFever chapter 1 . 2/8/2012
Um, this kind of really sucked. The puncuation was absolutely terrible, you even used text speak a few times. It didn't have very much of a plot, and 5-hundred-something words was very rushed.