Reviews for In Sickness And Health
yulia.khrisantova chapter 6 . 6/24/2015
Dear Pantherlily! Your story is very good! Very well written and I love it!
It was such a good read!
I really, really like thise work! I was wondering if it would be okay for me to translate it into Russian. Your name and the original link will surely be attached))
Looking forward to your reply very much!
Monkeygirltoria chapter 3 . 9/17/2014
This is an amazing story! I wish I found this earlier! You are an amazing writer! Thank you for all of these cute feels! I can't wait to read the sequels! This is amazing! Bloody Brilliant! XXX- Monkeygirltoria
faaangurl chapter 7 . 3/27/2014
you think you can do this on your own but you can't nemo!
HellNWhatNot chapter 1 . 12/28/2013
God I love you!
Atemue chapter 4 . 10/4/2013
Interesting story so far, you have me hooked reading, though I have to stop for now because it's late over here and I am very tired. Too bad that this is a rather intensive moment and of course I am eager to find out what exactly happened with John and if he will be all right.

But I guess I'll find out tomorrow.

For now there is just one thing I'd like to point out. While the story is enjoyable, very much so, I noticed that there are some rather obvious switches from present to past tense during the storytelling which is a bit confusing. Did you asked for the help of a betareader before you posted your story? Because if not I would advise you to do so in the future or to proofread your story yourself before you post it. I myself use betareaders, even when I am writing a story in my birth language because I know from personal experience that I always tend to oversee the one or other mistake, simply because in my mind I already know what I am supposed to read and that's what I do read, even if it's not written down there. Therefore it's always a good idea to have a second opinion in form of a read who did not have anything to do with the writing process of the story.

Well, that was just a friendly advise from fellow author to fellow author. Other than that there is nothing more to say just that I am looking forward to read the other chapters as soon as I am awake again. :)


Usagi-Atemu-Tom /_\
plushfrogpillow chapter 4 . 7/15/2013
I hope this comes across as constructively as I mean it.

Your story reads like a role play thread. If that is how you want it to be, that's fine. If you want it to read more like an account of events as they happened, you need to break up your paragraphs. It currently reads:
John does something (1)
Sherlock reacts (1)
Sherlock says something (2)
Sherlock does something (3)
Sherlock says something (4)
John reacts (2)
John reacts (3)
John reacts (4)
John says something (5)
Sherlock reacts (3)
Sherlock reacts (4)
Sherlock reacts (5)

If you want it to read more as an account of events it should be:
John says something (1)
Sherlock reacts (1)
Sherlock says something (2)
John reacts (2)
John does something (3)
Sherlock reacts (3)
John says something (4)
Sherlock reacts (4)
sumthin.clever.5 chapter 1 . 7/4/2013
This story has potential. I can see it. But as the nitpicky grammar nazi I am, you need to be aware of a few things:

The argument over jam was WAY over the top. It felt like half the chapter. And then when Sherlock said he'd go buy some more, John looked at him confused and then said he'd go do it. What was the point?
Then there's the fact that this isn't edited enough. Grammar misuse. Sudden change in tense. Sudden change in POV.
I advise a beta. Or more editing before you post.
Lemoonpie chapter 1 . 6/24/2013
Okay,this is really scary. I role play Johnlock with my friends a lot, my name is Audrey and I play John. And my friends keep tellling what a great John I am. And now,I'm scared with such coincidence. The story is uber cute,by the way 3 gonna keep following it 3
ConsultingWriter chapter 14 . 3/2/2013
This is so amazing. I've spent all afternoon reading this! :D
ConsultingWriter chapter 1 . 3/1/2013
Omgeeee! So great! :)
hushedjournal6 chapter 27 . 12/24/2012
I love how you ended this story :-) I look forward to the continuing part!
Scarlet chapter 27 . 12/21/2012
Loved this story to bits. Wonderful job, I loved your AU. I can't wait to read the sequel. :)
hushedjournal6 chapter 24 . 12/21/2012
WHY DID HE TEXT SARAH!? John, you are not dumb. Stop it. Stop it now! (I know that was only one line in the story but it made me angry!)
hushedjournal6 chapter 23 . 12/21/2012
They simply can't catch a break, can they? :(
hushedjournal6 chapter 21 . 12/21/2012
Oh, god, oh, god, oh, god, really!? D-:
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