Reviews for Fai's Close Encounter
Infinity in Blue chapter 3 . 3/11/2013
D-. poorly thought out, rushed and VERY ooc.
wolf1380 chapter 3 . 2/13/2012
a little confusing. dont even know fai was a vampire, first his hurt then not. good story, but a little too fast pasted, things happening too fast and lots of jumping a round. would have liked to see more. more details and desciptions.
wolf1380 chapter 2 . 2/13/2012
liked it, but moved alittle to fast. would have liked to see more details.
Silent Sentimentality chapter 1 . 2/13/2012
I think the premise of your story is good, but a few points must be pointed out to make the story great. Consider replacing words with thoughts or actions. Thoughts explore character depth while actions provide transitions from point A to point B, tying the significant with the small details. In the fight scene, paint a picture. How does the fight progress? Pace yourself, using detail to give a sense of atmosphere. It must be said how Fai's screaming shattered the seriousness with its excessiveness. Revise your future chapters carefully. I look forward to using your blossoming as an author! XD


Silent Sentimentality
ShizuRP chapter 1 . 2/12/2012
Awww! What happened to Fai-chan? Please update soon~!
wolf1380 chapter 1 . 2/12/2012
like it so far. looking forward to see were it goes.