|Reviews for Chronicles of the Sword|
| Twilight16 chapter 2 . 3/6
*shudder* yesss, suffer little hero, ssufffer! heheh hehhh
| Twilight16 chapter 1 . 3/6
As soon as i read that Link dies *shudder* i couldn't stop myself i was too excited, i NEED to read it!
| KHLegacy chapter 55 . 7/23/2013
I hope Reina get's exactly what she deserves something bad I hope Link is gonna take them all down now good chapter!
| KHLegacy chapter 54 . 6/28/2013
Wow I loved this twist keep up the good work I can't wait for more
| KHLegacy chapter 53 . 6/8/2013
I knew that Ghirahim Koume and Kotake we're evil and undermining Ganondorf but to curse his children LINK KICK THIER BUTTS! good chapter!
| Ryan Larsen chapter 12 . 5/8/2013
I loved the state farm reference xD, that was great
| KHLegacy chapter 52 . 5/7/2013
You're welcome poor TP Link it just can't let it go but can you blame it keep up the good work and go Groose for getting the ghosts can't wait to see what's next
| KHLegacy chapter 51 . 4/30/2013
Raven's a wolf and these Umbra crystals must be messing with Link and Co.'s heads (By which I mean the four Links keep up the good work I can't wait to see what happens next!
| Arcawolf chapter 10 . 4/28/2013
“Saria, use those leaf blades to attack the head!” Heh, heh. I’m having Pokémon flashbacks.
Okay, these next two questions relate specifically to chapter 8: Why is seeing Ghirahim again such a horror for Link? Unless I forgot something, the only thing he did in this story was rent a room at his mother’s inn.
Is Saria planning to leave the party? The way she was speaking to Link sounded like she wouldn’t be around to try and avenge her family. She's placing the responsibility completely on him to avenge them; shouldn't she at least feel some to have a part in it? I mean it might be Link’s destiny to slay Ganondorf, but that shouldn’t stop her from trying to help him fight Ghirahim or do it herself.
Won't lie. Wolf!Link's pretty cute when he's not trying to kill people.
I like that Link isn’t jumping on the bandwagon to kill Ganondorf. I think that one thing the games do miss out on is that Link often is a kid in these adventures, having all these terrible things happen to him, but he never reacts like a kid would (though granted, he is intended to mostly be a blank slate so the player can project their own feelings). This is more realistic and hopefully opens the way for some nice character development down the road.
| KHLegacy chapter 50 . 4/26/2013
Takeshi likes Asami! good chapter I can't wait to see what's next!
| Halestorming chapter 50 . 4/25/2013
I liked it. It's nice to see everyone through another set of eyes sometimes. It takes you away from the constant views everyone shares and refocuses your own view, adding to the overall flow of the story. I may have said this before (I'd be shocked if I haven't), but you are an excellent writer! I very rarely see stories with this good of flow or this well-written. Can't wait for your next installment!
| Arcawolf chapter 7 . 4/20/2013
Groose is an fun guy. It's refreshing to have a character who doesn't like the hero without a) 'secretly' being a bad guy, b) being a total a-hole that's only there to whine and complain or c) existing just so the good guys can show how much better they are than him. I really do hope he gets his chance to be a hero later. He kind of has that underdog vibe because everyone seems to consider him so useless but he's still so eager to volunteer help.
That Wolfos-lycan connection doesn't exist in the actual game, right? Because that would be a serious case of Fridge Horror O.o
This is starting to fall into the same trap that BoB did: too many characters and not enough personality . Granted, it's probably worse for me since I don't much about LoZ and characters like Scott and Impa are completely new to me. However, even characters like Midna and Zelda are starting to lose the personality they had earlier.
This is a tough thing to help with, but here's what I can recommend: do you know those quiet scenes in movies where characters just sit around a fire and talk about something not completely plot-related? (Like family or death. Look up Action Film, Quiet Drama Scene for examples). That's exactly what this story needs: a chance for the characters to simply reveal who they are and grow.
| Arcawolf chapter 4 . 4/20/2013
Nitpick here, but the house lord’s words at the beginning bother me. 3,583 wounded… the number’s too precise, if you’re following me. Especially since the numbers mentioned before and afterwards are nice rounded numbers (which is what you would expect a regular person to say). It isn’t a big issue, but it is jarring to me.
Huh, Link actually starting to act like a wolf. That’s a really neat touch. Curious to see where you’ll take this.
I’ve reached the attack on the mansion. Okay, you should be careful about how much you take from X-Men. Homages are fine, but watch out you don’t cross the line. I find this too similar to the same scene from X-Men to be comfortable.
Additionally, try not to use so many short scenes. Jumping from scene to scene and character to character works fine in movies because they have the benefit of visuals, but that’s not the case in books. In books it’s disorienting. I personally would recommend a minimum of 300 words or so for a scene. Less than that, and either lengthen it, combine it with another, or get rid of it.
| Arcawolf chapter 3 . 4/15/2013
Those people are right. Wolf W. Wolfson is a terrible name!
Wait, this is a crossover with X-Men?
Oh, Zelda. I only know her from Twilight Princess and The Wind Waker, so this side of her is definitely different. (Is her personality taken from Skyward Sword? I’ve seen a little bit of it and it seems to match). I like her. She has that right touch of immaturity and innocence/nativity that makes her funny.
Needing a bit of clarification here: the other lycans from Snowpeak, do only their shadows change into wolves, and they don’t change themselves?
One thing you should watch out for are instances where you assume the readers know something they actually don’t, like the Midna-Link-Soldier thing from chapter 1 and these couple of lines from chapter 2:
"Yes. Can we get him? Please?" Zelda asked. / Proteus, as if knowing what was going on, said, "I think it's a good idea."
The implication here is that the reader also knows what is going on, but they actually don’t. It can definitely be inferred, but the choice of language suggests that it was mentioned beforehand. Anyways, it’s an easy enough thing to fix up. Just rephrase it.
| Arcawolf chapter 2 . 4/13/2013
Okay, staring off with this story. So far, I’m liking it. It’s an interesting idea, and the description’s far stronger in this story than it is in BoB. I’ll be interesting to see where you take Link’s personality. Midna seems in character, though why is she in the light realm instead of the twilight realm? My knowledge of LoZ is fairly weak, so I also have to ask: is that fairy the AU version of Navi or another character completely?
Wait, so Link’s not the only person who can change into a wolf now? Between that and Midna’s appearance, the impression I’m getting is that the twilight and light realms merged together. Guess I’ll have to find out.
One question I have: what was up with Link and the soldiers? At first he stands out and just watches, which makes sense seeing as he’s confused. But then Midna asks him to help her fight them and he just goes, ‘Oh, okay.’ Why is he so easily talked into this? He doesn’t know Midna, he knows these are soldiers and I’m presuming he knows that there are consequences to go along with attacking authority. Plus, Link doesn’t seem to have anything against soldiers, so it’s odd that he would so easily be persuaded by Midna into helping. The villagers were the ones that were angry about the taxes. Link himself never had any in-text feelings towards them one way or another, even when he’s remembering his father’s death.