I can't even

It has bit too much smut in it, but then isn't this story targeted at teens anyway? ;)

This is my third time reading this story, and my favorite part in it all is No.1 nearly fucking Juliet into the wall... that would be a great idea for a one-shot *wink, wink, nudge nudge* U

Hey, just finished reading, loved it. I must amit though, making Holly more human seemed to take away from what I thought was her base character, she also seemed a bit weak willed towards the end. But I was not deterred, haha what a story.

You've turned Trouble into a cackling cartoon villain for the sake of contriving the most hackneyed plot device any romance can have the misfortune of featuring. I won't say 'how dare you!' because it's pretty clear how, but I will say that just because you can get away with it doesn't mean you should.

revisiting this for the third time but commenting on it for the first time
i literally crack every time i see artemis saying, "who's artemis?"

Sorry but I don't remember what chapter it was but when Artemis is about to get mind wiped, holly is running to get the wings to get to Artemis, wouldn't she already have a visa or something because she was going to get wiped too

I love all 24 of your chapters, there interesting, long, and sexy as hell

I recall the first time this went up. Still one of my personal favourites.

You have 800 reviews, yet you asked for 250-300 until you put up chapter 25 the last chapter. I must now remind you that you ONLY HAVE 24 CHAPTERS! WTF!

No.1 rules all B.T.W.

WHY DID YOU DO THAT TO No.1!? HE WAS SUPPOSED TO BE INNOCENT! WHYYYYYYYYYYY

Amazing, absolutely incredible. I read the first chapter and was impressed by the details and the insight in the smut scenes, by the time I got to chapter 3 I was stuck in the story.

The story draws you in, the details and quality in writing turns it alive. On multiple occasions I found myself laughing out loud and lets not mention the smut scenes :3. I love the character and relations development, I love how you made all characters feel as they should even in the later chapters where you took them "out of character" it STILL felt as it should and natural.

I think the part I like the most is the epilogue because it wraps things up and gives you a sense of completion. That does not mean I didn't LOVE the rest but the epilogue really shows your talent as an author, It takes skill to write a story like yours to completion and then wrapping it up well.

The only thing I would change is maybe using a different word than cock when you read from Artemis perspective as I think he would use a less crude word for it, other than that I think its just perfect.

this story is the shitttttt

Third line from the bottom 8th word it says on not one

Yes! No more gagging and vomiting. Smut Free!