|Reviews for Blondes in Bed: Two Leaves|
| honter11 chapter 1 . 2/12
Hi friend here again please can you put Naruto-Ino-Hinata trio after the war would be great and also Pokemon with Ash-May-Serena would be good.
| honter11 chapter 1 . 2/12
Hi friend, I really liked it and if it's Naruino you can put another post after the fight with Pein or another after the fourth war and with epilogue and also Dragon Ball with Goku-Bulma before the Martial Arts Tournament is in chapter 133 please.
| YeagerMeister31 chapter 1 . 1/5
my second fav pairing after NaruSaku and an amazing story add in Ramen and perfect lol great work
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/27/2016
| 6410934WE50M3 chapter 1 . 6/14/2014
| NaruIno 1 fan chapter 1 . 7/6/2013
.AWESOME! MAN i just love this cople and i cant get enough of it!
| hi chapter 1 . 6/25/2013
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/28/2013
because you do a threesome with Naruto Ino and Hinata and other Naruto Ino and Samui
| vvfavfvavfavghmf chapter 1 . 2/8/2013
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| Guest chapter 1 . 1/27/2013
awesome you just put me in naruto x ino and out of naruto x hinata
| ChaosMagemon chapter 1 . 6/1/2012
I knew there'd be hope for these two at the end of the Pain invasion in the anime she admitted she could fall for Naruto.
| ShikaInoInuKikIchiHime36 chapter 1 . 5/26/2012
| naruto42 chapter 1 . 3/27/2012
You should really just combine all your blondes in bed into one story with each one shot being a chapter.
| Man of Sitruuna chapter 1 . 2/24/2012
For the love of God, please use commas in your paragraphs and sentences. My eyes cringe whenever I have to look over a 70-word-long unbroken sentence.
A perfect example for you to rectify:
"Ino caressed her breasts while Naruto pinched her nipples and she felt his length hit her inner walls of flesh while he started licking her neck with his hot tongue and the slender woman only moaned at this as her arousal only made her insides wetter and that worked perfectly for Naruto as he thrust into the moist area that surrounded his length.
Naruto let out a husky growl at how warm and wet Ino felt on the inside as the friction controlled both of their movements with every single part of their bodies swaying with the blonde woman's ass tapping her lover's crotch as it hit her rear over and over again.
Naruto licked the back of Ino's ear and she blushed at how warm his tongue felt on her ear before he started kissing her lower jaw and she tried kissing him in return but he was pounding into her so much that she couldn't concentrate on him well enough, so she would have to wait before she could try kissing him."
That's THREE consecutive paragraphs without a single piece of punctuation other than an ending period! Big tip for the future: When proof reading, read a sentence out loud to yourself. If you have to stop to breathe, then that's where you put down a comma or period.
I've read a few of your other lemons, and suffice to say that when I've read one, I've effectively read them all. There's a little bit of conversation at the start, the first round, often there's the second round, then a tiny amount of banter and that's it.
And on the subject of the lemon content itself...it's awfully linear in it's descriptions. It fits well with the 'IKEA Erotica' trope found on tvtropes.
Regardless, I'm glad that there are other people writing for NaruIno, so I'll thank you for that. I wish you all the best in the future.
| El Frijolero chapter 1 . 2/19/2012
Nice story like the lemon