Reviews for Rhyme and Dine
baconis1priority chapter 1 . 2/24/2012
Haha I love the poem! It's really cute, sweet and funny too! Teehee that part about the erection made me giggle and my dad asked if I was ok _ wonderful!

Vincerre chapter 1 . 2/20/2012
Hmm. So I read this and I said to myself 'the plot is pretty good, but I can't get past all this change in tense and the use of writer insertion'. o: Just me personally, I don't like seeing the phrases "I mean" or "You know" when I'm reading fanfiction. But hey, I read your profile and I must say that this is not bad at all for a twelve year old (When I was eleven and writing fanfics under a different penname, it was for Sonic the Hedgehog and the chapters were 400 words long with passable grammar and spelling but messed up plotwork EVERYWHERE). So, all in all, a fun read. I would just suggest that you keep yourself and the reader out of your work a little more. :3