If I were to write the story I would get rid of the Damian Vector subplot completely and just focused upon the main HBP storyline.

The relationship feels rushed. They haven't even known each other for that long.

Not sure I like the unspeakables being a part of this story. They weren't part of canon and I don't see what changes from canon warrant the inclusion of such characters.

What q wonderful and compelling story! I hope everything is going well in your life and i hope you’ll be returning to this amazing fic!

That was a wonderful work! It’s a pity that it wasn’t finished.

Your story is amazing! I really enjoy your take on the time travel aspects. Also: I am so sorry for your loss. It might not be as fresh when you read this, as it was when you updated, but your friend sounded like a great person and I am sorry you had to already manage now a few years without her support. It is wonderful that you did got back to update this story after everthing that happened in your life at that time. This last chapter was a very good read! I sincerely hope you'll be returning to this story again, so we all can read how this awesome story continues. Wishing you all the best!

Just found this story and spent the weekend reading it. Sorry to hear that you lost a good friend. I have many thoughts but will send you a PM as I don't want my thoughts to interfere with your muse and storytelling. Once again, thank you for your entertaining words.

I normally don’t read works that are still in progress, especially ones that haven’t been updated in so long, but I am so incredibly glad I did this once. I have fallen in love it with your story and I’m heartbroken I don’t have more to read. You’re younger Severus might be the best I have ever read. Thank you for sharing your work here and I am forever hopeful you’ll return to finish. Best of wishes!

I just found this and I really hope you finish some day. this was incredibly and very much worth the read though not finished.

Oh, this is such a good story-I do hope you continue it.

And I hope that Younger Sev remembers he has some apologizing to do to Hermione. Fortunately, she's not Lily and will actually listen to him when he tells her things.

Please, please come back to this story.

This almost makes me want to go back to those awkward, embarrassing, shy, introverted teenaged years so very long ago...almost!

update if you can

It's sad that this is unfinished with as well done as it is. You have a real talent for capturing that frisson of excitement in passionate relationships.

I always worry a bit when I see abandoned works from authors who are obviously both passionate about their stories and very talented. I hope that all is well with you IRL and that someday you have the inspiration to finish this.

I can’t believe Dumbledore didn’t say anything about telling Hermione to be quiet about Severus. I mean I’m not surprised because he is so conniving but still. Ugh, jerk.