|Reviews for fullmetal twilite|
| Gentle Caress chapter 1 . 2/9
NO YOU DO NOT BRING MY EDDY INTO THIS YOU HEAR ME?! THE ONLY PERSON I APPROVE OF HIM BEING WITH IS WINRY, NOT STUPID MOTHERF*CKING BELLA AND HE DOES NO IN ANY SHAPE FORM OR EVEN IN SPIRIT LOOK LIKE EDWARD CULLEN! CULLEN CAN GO AND STAY DEAD IN A DITCH, ELRIC FTW
| Masquerade Brawler chapter 1 . 11/19/2013
Such good right. Many good.
...Please don't publish anything ever again.
| Aquiescence chapter 1 . 10/20/2013
I think I killed a few thousand brain cells... oh my dear lord. First of all, dear 'Tara' [I hardly believe this is Tara, hers was extremely hilarious in all of it's Errors.] your grammar is atrocious, overly so.
Second, my doll, you're a very contradictory person - you're goth, yet you damn Preps? I gathered that goth people are all about acceptance and that the black colour is simply making a statement? If so, you're not goth, you're a weeaboo.
Third, please go die in a ditch. The only thing even REMOTELY similar about both Edwards are their eyes - and I say remotely because Cullen's eyes are the color of three-day-old piss mixed with ejaculation and excrement. Ed's eyes, on the other hand, are the color of molten gold.
Fourth - please move to Alaska and jump off of a cliff.
| Skydancing Dragon chapter 1 . 10/15/2013
1. I'm sorry, there are too many grammatical errors. I am able to comprehend most of your story, and I agree that it might be good if you'd elaborated, inserted details, and corrected your spelling/punctuation. This is not a texting site.
2. You didn't rate this story correctly. If they had...er...s*x, then you should have rated it M.
3. I am honored to be a flamer. More like a beta.
BUT I'M A FLAMER. Thank you very much.
| A Darker Heaven and Hell chapter 1 . 10/9/2013
So many errors!
Grammar and spelling is appalling, plot is horrid, characters are OOC to the point of it being a complete mess, and I'm offended that you would bring Full metal Alchemist into this. Next time, please spend actual time and energy to write something worth reading. Thank you.
| pastafangirl chapter 1 . 10/2/2013
NONONONONO! Why?! First you destroy Harry Potter and now FMA?! Stop ruining my favorite things. I want to cry now TT-TT
Edward-kun... Don't worry it will be okay. Just walk the OOC off. I won't let her corrupt you. Just go with Winry and Al and I'll take care of her. STOP WRITING ALREADY! JUST STOP YOU NEED A ELEMENTARY EDUCATION AT THE VERY LEAST TO WRITE FANFICTION! HAVE YOU EVEN WATCHED FMA OR FMA:B HAVE YOU?! STOP TRYING!
| Hermione Is My Role Model chapter 1 . 9/5/2013
Are you the one who wrote "my immortal"? You suck at writing. Find a different hobby.
| kimihichi chapter 1 . 7/6/2013
You're a troll so I'm not going to say shit about your stories. But I want to tell you to refrain from writing about other Animes and Stories.
AND DON'T EVEN THINK ABOUT FUCKING UP NARUTO! PLEASE! T.T
I'LL DO ANYTHING! :'(
Anyways, I bid farewell.
| readwritereview chapter 1 . 7/3/2013
you know what, this sucks. but it's twilight in a nutshell
| lafellana chapter 1 . 6/17/2013
I'm really not sure what this story is supposed to be...
Honestly, I'm just here to read the comments, those are some entertaining shit.
Before I go - honey, please write more fanfics. I could read these comments for days (seriously, there's like 50 pages of them for this chapter alone).
| Go Fuck Yourself chapter 1 . 6/14/2013
Ma'am, you can't spell worth shit. You NEED to to go back to 3rd grade. Not should. You need too. You obviously can't spell and decided to write yet another shitty FanFiction. God help us all. You still can't write for shit and decided to watch us suffer. My god you are a twisted bitch. Fuck you. No other words need to be said. Just go fuck your self.
- The General Public
| Guest chapter 1 . 5/29/2013
| Madame Reviewer chapter 1 . 5/5/2013
Have you considered taking writing classes? I believe that would benefit you greatly. Everything in this story is upside down. Firstly, an amazing manga/anime mixed with such an awful saga is plain wrong. You have portrayed Edward's character horribly. You never explained how he encountered the duet; you also obviously need an eye doctor, for there is almost no resemblance between the two "Edwards".
Edward Elric would be far more suspicious if he meet a sparkly "vampire". No one would simply give away their name to a random stranger. As much as I loath Swan, I believe they she is educated enough to tell the difference between Cullen and Elric. Edward clearly would never would hit on a girl; the anime/manga is crystal-clear proof of this fact.
At first glance, there is NO way to tell the difference between a regular person and an alchemist. The only way to know is to actually see a person perform alchemy. Elric would also refuse going to the bar and drink with a duet he knows almost nothing of. According to the anime/manga, he would not make out with a girl he JUST met, whilst her lover is occupied.
Also, cheating in a relationship means that you have ANY physical relationship with someone other than your significant other. So thus, Swan WAS cheating on Cullen with Elric. A resemblance between Cullen and Elric makes no difference. You also didn't explain anything about Elric spending the night with Cullen and Swan.
Finally, Elric would never have a threesome with a duet he JUST met, period. According to the anime/manga, it takes time for Elric to build trust for someone. I hope you will acknowledge my criticism, (and spell check) in order to become a better writer. Thank you for your time.
| BlackBloodyRose13 chapter 1 . 4/15/2013
TARA UR BAK! PLIZ RITE MOR!
| YouTube Powers of Stupidity chapter 1 . 4/8/2013
Oh god...WHAT THE HELL, TARA?! AGAIN MUST YOU SPELL BAD?! AGAIN?! God...DON'T YOU EVER MIX TWISHIT WITH THE MOST AWESOME ANIME/MANGA! And you really need to go back to first grade...seems you still haven't mastered spelling yet.