|Reviews for Reconciliation|
| J.E.M chapter 3 . 2/10
OK,I'M JUST GOING TO PRETEND THAT HICCUP DOESN'T HAVE LONG HAIR ! BECAUSE HICCUP DOESN'T LOOK LIKE A GUY WHO SUPPOSED TO HAVE LONG HAIR,HE MORE OF A GUY WITH SHORT HAIR RATHER THAN LONG HAIR .
| R-dude chapter 3 . 1/19
Okay, this is as far as I can go. At least a semblance of characterization is necessary for something like this to be readable.
| Guest chapter 10 . 12/14/2013
Ending is sooooooo sweet. It makes me want to laughter and cry.
| Guest chapter 2 . 10/25/2013
| Jarjaxle chapter 10 . 4/22/2013
This was Awesome story! One The best HiccupxAstrid Stories...And Also One the Greatest Hiccup Leaves From Berk Stories in Movie timeline...
Can't wait to start to read teh Sequal of this...
| 348joey chapter 10 . 4/6/2013
Ah, the long-awaited wakeup scene. Satisfying.
And for errors:
The familiar taste of dead fish was dull yet still present in his dry mouth, and the whole room seemed to smell of a tragic combination of wet grass, salty air and human sweat...although not his just his.
Because this isn't a news article, you should add a comma after "and." Also, remove the "his" before "just."
Hiccup hauled himself up to sit straight-backed against the hard wooden wall at the head of the bed, wondering dully why doing had been quite so much trouble; he had almost overbalanced and fallen onto the windowsill to his immediate left.
Add "so" after "doing."
and swelled with joy as the ground around him laughed appreciatively
"Crowd" not "ground" I think.
But as the thump of naked feet upon bare wood made its way up the staircase and right up to the door to Hiccup's room.
No subject. It's just a long preposition. Consider removing the word "as."
and without knowing why he was saying it, Hiccup replied "Yeah, me too dad."
"Dad" should be capitalized, as it takes the place of his name.
| 348joey chapter 9 . 4/4/2013
Good chapter. You mentioned proofing in the last chapter, so I decided to put up the errors I found while reading.
Smiling down at her him, she squeezed his hand
remove the word "her."
...or should they let him keep they knee
It should be "the knee" not "they knee"
Astrid didn't even notice as fell asleep once more.
Add "she" before "fell asleep."
"I don't want to go back to the mushroom island...
Add quotation marks after the ellipsis.
And her attempt at rising from the floor was even more difficult, proving to the young woman once and for all how very much rest she needed.
Remove the word "very." Also consider taking out the phrase "once and for all"; it isn't needed here.
Much nearer, the orange glow of numerous torches attached to the sides of the longboat upon which she had been resting cast countless rays through the misty airs around, shimmering brightly on the dark ocean's surface.
It's all a bunch of prepositional phrases, no clear subject. You could change "shimmering" to "shimmered."
Staggering a little from the shock of such a violent, the Viking
A violent what?
...the Nadder had obviously not been expecting anyone to on her from behind,
Add "sneak up" after "to."
She didn't care what anyone said anymore...she was going to sleep at the boy's side, would they or no.
"would they or no" doesn't make any sense. Rewrite that.
...the solemn look in the Night Fury's eyes told her that he could and would watch over Hiccup as he slept.
I suspect you meant to say "while she slept," unless Toothless can watch people in his sleep.
...the young woman said with a smile, and closed the door to the injured man's room, leaving boy and dragon alone together.
Remove the comma after "and," as "closed the door to the injured man's room, leaving boy and dragon alone together." is not a complete thought.
And as she laid Hiccup gentle down upon his bed...
Change "gentle" to gently."
And now the young woman found herself tasked with not only bringing Hiccup safely back up to his room in the chief's house (she pondered vaguely why Stoick wouldn't do it himself, but could hardly put any thought to the matter due to her exhausted state), but watching staying to watch over him that night while the others talked Viking policy.
When using "not only," you should also use "but also" instead of just "but." Also, remove either "watching" or "staying to watch," as they mean the same thing.
| Great chapter 2 . 1/30/2013
These are great stories
| Marcus S. Lazarus chapter 11 . 1/17/2013
An interesting sequel, to say the least.
Your exploration of Berk in a world where the Green Death was never defeated is simple but effective- dragon attacks escalating and no end in sight-, and Astrid’s decision to leave now makes perfect sense, having attempted to hang on out of a sense of civic duty before she’s pushed to the point where she HAS to leave.
Her subsequent decision to find Hiccup might seem impulsive at first, but considering the reference to her having previous released the training dragons, it makes sense, reflecting how Hiccup DID encourage her to think about the dragons as more than animals and is currently the only significant alternative to what she already knows (Although I think that you should have dialled down her ‘admiration’ of Stormfly after they meet for the first time in so long here; even if she has come to accept that her old ideas about dragons are wrong, some instinctive caution, fear and/or apprehension would only be natural).
Still, regardless of my thoughts on Astrid’s reaction to the dragons, Hiccup’s development is certainly appropriate, his physical capabilities strengthened by years on his own with only Toothless and some other dragons for company, to say nothing of his more automatic aggression when faced with human contact once again.
The secret history of dragons and Vikings was interesting without being corny- it’s certainly possible that an island like that could be out there in canon without anyone being aware of it-, and their return to Berk certainly works, Astrid giving Hiccup the resolve to take action now that he’s been reminded of what he has to fight for rather than his pre-existing pattern of just trying to be left alone as they make their stand against the Red Death (For the record, I think that the other dragons never acted against it because it was in a very defensible position that limited the value of their numerical advantage; the Vikings drove it out, and THEN the other dragons could attack it without it being able to just wait them out).
Still, all in all, aside from my ambiguity about the whole ‘dragon/rider psychic link’ thing (Sounds a bit too ‘Eragon’ for my taste; I prefer the idea of the dragons in this series forming a connection with their riders WITHOUT needing that kind of ‘support’), an excellent and intriguing story that uses what happened in the movie while adding its own twist to events, as well as sowing some interesting seeds for how Hiccup will return to life on Berk and explore his new relationship with Astrid (As well as some details about what he’s been up to since he left); keep up the good work!
| PercyJacksonWillKickYourButt chapter 2 . 12/5/2012
Really? Big-Boobied Bertha? WHY!?
And how can a village continue to strive without men...?
| EndlessChains chapter 11 . 11/26/2012
This next installment from your first one was quite good on interpreting the many feelings that both parties feel. You depicted the scenes almost like a movie but was not the movie, if that makes any sense. The journey to look for Hiccup was quite interesting on how Astrid was able to get her Nadder and the meeting with Hiccup was quite dark and exciting. Living in solitude could really change a person and you showed it really well in this story. The prophecy of the humans and dragons working together in the past was a great background information on the past vikings. This showed some sort of hope for change. The mind reading between riders and dragons was also a good addition to show that they bonded and not a bad idea to put in. The battle made sense on how Hiccup lost his leg, because when I watched the movie, I was confused on how he lost a leg and your interpretation made sense that I could agree with that idea. Thank you. Keep up the good work.
| WolfSpirit223 chapter 6 . 11/18/2012
this is great
| WolfSpirit223 chapter 2 . 11/17/2012
this is great
| ShroudedInMist chapter 11 . 10/4/2012
| Stupid chapter 4 . 8/18/2012
Hiccup Shouldn't have long hair