Reviews for Young Love: Dylan and Lily
Guest chapter 6 . 5/12/2016
Please,please,PLEASE,write a new chapter
Guest chapter 6 . 4/30/2016
Please write more!
Paige chapter 6 . 12/11/2014
Wow that was a great story keep going I need to hear more! Well bye
musiicmonii chapter 6 . 9/6/2014
Guest chapter 6 . 8/9/2014
So GREAT! Please update.
bewaremypengirl chapter 6 . 7/11/2014
Guest chapter 6 . 6/20/2014
This story is wonderful. Please write more. I feel soooo sorry for Lily. Everyone is so in character - it's great. Thanks.
Ausllyawesomness2003 chapter 6 . 5/27/2014
PLEASE CONTINUE I ABSOLUTELY LOVE THIS FIC! I also have a suggestion for a later chapter. If you feel awkward righting a make-out scene, you don't have to, ok? I think it could go something like this;
Lily ran into the janitor's closet, and couldn't believe that Hannah yanked the loose thread on her shirt and literally showed her bra ti every one in school. She slammed the door and started sobbing. Just as she did that, Dylan came running down the hall, screaming her name. He stopped when he heard his girlfriend's sniffles. He gently opened the closet door to find a puffy-eyed Lily, who when he came in, quickly covered herself with her sweater. "I'm so sorry she did that. I never thought she would take something to this extreme.", he said as she sat down next to her. Dylan put an arm around her and said," Don't worry. I'll make sure nothing like that happens again." "Aww thanks.", Lily said while giving him a little kiss on the cheek. "That's all I get?", Dylan said with puppy dog eyes. "Ok, I'll give you some more", Lily said. She sat on his lap and started kissing him like she never had before.

You decide where it goes from there :)
Awesome1 chapter 6 . 4/12/2014
anie chapter 6 . 4/6/2014
C'mon hanger keep writing
Kitty chapter 6 . 2/14/2014
Pleeeeeeeeease write more!
Guest chapter 6 . 1/6/2014
I need more plz
Katniss the Cattail chapter 4 . 1/5/2014
This is like the cutest thing ever! Keep up those amazing writing skills, just try and get over a thousand words per chapter believe me it is a pain in the butt, and you may find yourself getting very frustrated, however its so worth it because it will make you ten times of a better writer, I'm interested in being your "beta" or mentor. PM me and we'll talk about your future as an author.
Guest chapter 6 . 1/1/2014
OMG no
Gr8ter Girl chapter 1 . 7/24/2013
I love it! It was incredibly amazing. Anyway I thought of some ideas for your next story or chapter. The reason why I want to share some ideas with you because I want you to get lots of reviews and also I want you to thank me. Here are the ideas enjoy :) Anyway, Dylan and Lily were finishing their last jobs for the zoo until Kelly told them a friend will be visiting here tomorrow, but staying here for a week. The next day they get to meet the unfamiliar person Lily's ex boyfriend. Dylan was getting jealous because he think that Jason is spending too much time with Lily. (Lily's ex boyfriend also made up) He talk to his dad about the situation and he told him to tell her about he's felling. The next day he told lily about it, but she took the wrong idea and didn't talk to him for a day. Then Benjamin ask lily if she can baby sit Roise and she said yes. Dylan aplogizied and Lily accept it. They had all kinds of fun that day. later Jason was trying to make a move with Lily in the barn, but she slapped them and runs to tell Dylan. Dylan and Jason was fighting and Dylan won. He kissed Lily in front of everyone and she kissed back. Through out the story they had Hurt/Comfort/ Romance. Please don't change the characters perspective and personality and they are all the same ages, but Kelly and Benjamin are going to get married. Please use my idea and update more. Stay smart, but write like a pro.- Gr8ter Girl
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