|Reviews for Taking Over|
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/13/2013
Guest below me is a moron. u.u
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/1/2012
Tofu burger?wtf is tat?burger is a snack with 2 buns and ketchup&mayonese,and vegetable,why the fuck you must put tofu in a burger?
Not bad again Keono-sempai...but not as good as Woolfy-sempai's ...(yep I call my fav authors,sempai!)
| Syn Akatsuki chapter 1 . 9/16/2012
| AkumaNoDanna chapter 1 . 8/15/2012
I had brilliant ideas of what to comment about, but that smut wiped it all out of my brain. I am not happy.
Uhh.. lemme try to remember. OK, firstly, I seriously laughed out loud when Deibabe called Sassy 'Mama' and Sassy was like 'No, I am Sasori.' xD It was just so goddamn epic xD
I still find it quite... awkward, when Konan is put into the fujoshi role. And might I add that her being Dei's mom only increases the weirdness. I don't think I've ever done that myself so far (for some reason, I always tend to make Konan a badass xD Imho it's to be expected when she lives together with a bunch of boys... that lucky bitch.) I don't think I actually mind the fujoshi Konan, but... idk. It's unnatural, is all, imo. On the other hand, fanfiction and naturalness don't really go together anyway and Konan is kind of fun to fool around with like that. xD
Um, right after that 16 year time skip, you've referred to Sassy as a twenty-three year old, which doesn't really make sense, since before the time skip he's 19. When I read it I was like 'Whoa, dude /is/ fucking immortal! Ignoring time skip and shit!' xD Later on you've amended it to thirty-five, but it was just that one time that caught my attention. And once I saw the mistake, I could not just NOT correct it. Forgive me! .'
I really hate smoking irl, but in this fic it just makes the whole story... PERFECT ! And I couldn't help being all like 'Awwwww' when Sasori whispered "Go outside and have one, you're being cranky." when Dei was having trouble w/ the customers. It was just like AWWWIVGFIDNVBNFSKDVBBDFDFN KBDFB, Y'KNOW? xD
I also lol'd when Deidara stated that he was not gay. I was like LOL, nice try, brat.
In a nutshell, great story! Loved it! I really do enjoy your writing-style :3
| infinite vertigo chapter 1 . 6/3/2012
"If you start moving now I will scream at the top of my lungs and will convince everyone that you're raping me. Fucking. Wait."
HAHAHAH oh my God that line is golden. I cracked up reading it. This was so cute :) Well written and funny, a combination that's really pretty hard to find on this site and I'm glad to have found something. I very much enjoyed this :)
| Jinxed22 chapter 1 . 3/16/2012
Hahaha! reaallyyyy goooddd, I loved this line:
"Sure we do, but he's like a fucking hormonal teenager, un."
| Hovinarri chapter 1 . 3/7/2012
That was cool... I liked it how Deidara starting hating Sasori for something sort of trivial like that. Stuff like a smoothie on your head caused by someone you like can be a really big thing for a little kid, me thinks. *nods nods*
| Refrigerator-Burn chapter 1 . 2/22/2012
cute and funny, good job!
| AkatsukiMemberWoolfy chapter 1 . 2/21/2012
Yeah, I'm not going to do a review that is 9999 characters long XD Lolz XD
Smut! XD I'm now feeling like working on my SasoDei Macabre Camp story XD I even askd my History teacher what the people asked in Death Camps today XD The good thing about it is that I've already written a smut scene for it XD Woot XD
I was expecting rape with this story XD But ish still aweasome XD Saso luffs his little brat XD But they move need to stop smoking XD
I once drew a picture of Matt from Death Note and I showed it to my little cousin and his friend and they were both like "Yukky! He's smoking!" XD
Poor Pein DX He shall take over heaven XD
Saku-Slut is a bitch DX She needs to die in a fire inside of a church inside of a truck next to a motorcycle while wearing nothing except for a flammable blanket DX
Hinata is blind XD Naruto can be her seeing eye dog XD LAWNMOWER!
Zetsu thinks that all of the pants are lonelly DX You must free the plants! they will totally do better in the wild zetsu XD Lolz XD
SMUT! Sasori is aweasome XD I'm surprised the condom didn't break from the epicness XD Lolz XD
Aweasome story O Keep it up O
| Happii Haden chapter 1 . 2/20/2012
! I was so excited web I checked mai email and saw yu made a story. XD this was an awesome one shot. Hah Deid being fucked in the closest. Always fun (: I wish Mai mom was like Konan.