|Reviews for Undo Me prologue part 1|
| Jacobey M. Thompson chapter 1 . 2/29/2012
Great story. Love the plot I can see beginning to form. One flaw though. Just after the question, "you said you ran track in college, right?" is asked, Dean answers "yes." and then the narrator describes how he said it. It goes onto begin a new paragraph and continue with Deans thought. In this situation no new paragrapgh should be started and you should continue on the same line that you had begun. All-in-all great story I hope to read more.
Best wishes-J. M. T. (Jacobey Morgul Thompson)