Reviews for Night At The Cumberland |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I think the story is really cute. I love how Amanda snuggles up to him in her sleep. Proofreading will help you fix the errors. Don’t stop writing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() The sleepwalker excuse was perfect, what woman could resist Lee's dimpled grin? Lee's got it bad for Amanda when, "He could still feel his right cheek tingle, where she had caressed it in the car, weeks ago." Yessiree, Lee's head-over-heels alright! Amanda is smitten with Lee, but she doesn't want to risk being one of his love 'em and leave 'em babes. Indeed, that's exactly why Amanda keeps Lee at arm's length, "she was forcing him to take her seriously." Definitely enjoyed this story and would be interested in reading more from you. This story was fine; there weren't any noteworthy corrections. I discovered this one-and-only S&MK fanfic of yours because it was recommended reading to accompany the Mrs. King's Chronicles podcast discussing the episode, "Weekend." Sure wish you would write more S&MK fanfics. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is a really cute filler for this night. It stays true to the character's and I enjoyed it. Thanks for writing it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh, I liked this story very much! I wished it would've continued and that he stayed and they woke up together. Could've been interesting. Hope you're still writing! I could definitely see it all happening too! |
![]() ![]() very cute. I love reading into Lee mind about Amanda. And hers too. Very sweet filler. Sometime wished they really happened. |
![]() ![]() I think you should have waited to post this until it was betad. You could have expanded on this and turned it into a wonderful filler. As it stands, it's riddled with numerous grammar errors, and some of your verb tenses are off. Some sentences aren't even sentences, they're just fragments. And your missing the correct punctuation in several sentences. I see that you chose to do this all in Lee's POV however you slipped into Amanda's POV toward the end. I'm not throwing tomatoes at you! I'm just letting you know that instead of rushing to submit a story that's riddled with errors, maybe you should have taken the time to have it beta read, so everyone could truly appreciate the story. |
![]() ![]() This was great! Keep up the good work. I'll be looking for more of your stories. :) |
![]() ![]() Cute paintergirl! No wonder he looked so impish when he came out of the shower! You know one really nice thing about is that you can still beta this and then revise it! Get rid of those typos and fix anything you're not happy with when you re-read it yourself. |
![]() ![]() ![]() awwww, that was soooo sweet! loved the ending! |
![]() ![]() You know you're right about Lee being too happy that morning at the Cumberland. I didn't 3even think about it until I started to read this story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was a very sweet story! I enjoyed it very much ... ***SPOILER*** ###“Gotcha, partner.” Lee bent over and placed a gentle and almost lingering kiss on her forehead. Then he pulled away. “Sweet dreams.” He wished so much he could have stayed, now that he knew it would have been ok with her. His whole body was aching to go back. But he couldn’t. Smiling as he thought of the next morning, and all the possibilities, he turned around and blew out the candle. ### You saved the best for last ! |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was tender and lovely. You wrote it so I could see it happening. Very well done. |
![]() ![]() Before the tomatos start flying... yes I have thought about a beta and I PROMISE my next stories will have one. Just that this is my first and I wanted to get it up asap... uhm... hope ya'll understand. Sorry if there were any typos, gotta have a talk with my software Keep the opinions coming- every thought is appreciated! love, paintergirl |
![]() ![]() Cute filler. A few typos. Have you thought about a beta? |