|Reviews for Cold Heart|
| Guest chapter 1 . 4/18
| Brunette Bulma chapter 1 . 3/9/2012
Great idea,i like it,plz update soon...
| Tragicending1091 chapter 1 . 2/27/2012
Hmmm I like it! A lot! :) Just needs a little work try to slow it down a little, and you have minor grammar issues but nothing serious. :)
| IseeButterfly chapter 1 . 2/26/2012
Ok, this is an interesting idea, but you SO have to work more on your stories.
It's all rushed and not very detailed, and there are some grammar mistakes as well.
The greatest mistake is that you changed the POV in the middle of the story (from third person's view to the I-form and back again)
reread your chapter and edit it and try to work on your stories more, then this will be a great story ;)
| Gabreya chapter 1 . 2/25/2012
Great job. This is a good start to an interesting story. :) Wow. I have to admit that I was a little scared for Lisa because just when she was about to run out of the house, somebody which we all know is Jackson grabbed her by the arm and seemingly angry. I would've freaked out. Poor Lisa or is it lucky Lisa. :P
Still, I love it. Can't wait for the next chapter. :D
| trudes193 chapter 1 . 2/23/2012
Interesting story, looking forward to seeing where you are going to go with this. :D