|Reviews for Turkey Baster|
| Hushi Taloa chapter 20 . 3/13/2012
These short-chapter fics are equally good as long-chapter fics, but they certainly have a different feel to them. The action is choppy, and intense - kinda like freeze-frame filming. This particular chapter felt like the entire freaking world fell away from under Bella's feet. Yeah, maybe there were a few earthquake rumbles before, but in Chapter 20, the chasm yawned wide and Bella just disappeared into the bottomless pit.
Why is Rosalie so angry with Bella? Is she trying to justify the selfish stage of a new love, or the whole freaking plot to match Edward with Bella? I thought Bella had been a support to Rosalie since the Royce incident? I'm guessing Bella never asked to be set up with guys, so if Rosalie took that task on herself, why does she blame Bella so? I'm thinking I really hate Rosalie right about now.
I thought Bella was conflicted about having a baby for herself or for her sister. I thought she was dismissive of men, but actually still afraid of them (with the exception of Jasper). I also thought Bella was mean and rather cruel with Edward, but I understood how all that came from a place of pain and fear. Well, she certainly has been repaid in kind. Edward's words come from pain and fear, too, but they ARE harsh, so harsh. I'm bleeding for Bella, and sometimes in this story, I didn't even LIKE her.
Very effective writing. The whole story is still semi-veiled in mystery; motivations are splintered in hundreds of pieces for each character. I am curiouser and curiouser.
I can barely stand to wait for the next update. Thanks for sharing your talents.
P.S. Did it have to be OVARIAN cancer for Alice? Why not uterine? Ovarian cancer is a bad actor, asymptomatic until too late. Are Bella and Jasper going to have to lose Alice? Is that another thought that drives Bella to become pregnant and create more family?
P.P.S. I had said that I would go back and review the chapters I skipped, and I'm working on it. Very s-l-o-w-l-y. Your review numbers are ridiculous compared to your talents.
| alison actually chapter 20 . 3/13/2012
wow, this is the messiest mess, possibly ever.
I don't know who I feel most sorry for out of all of them, probably Edward who is now trying to do the right thing with a woman he didn't want after having his heart broken by the woman he did want.
Bella had weird but kind of good intentions originally, but she has messed this up so badly, she might end up on her own. I know she has no experience with men or relationships but still, she has to do better than this. I hope Angela can help her.
| jmrbear chapter 20 . 3/13/2012
What a gut wrenching chapter. I can't tell you how much I want to see Bella step up, be strong and make him listen to the truth. He may not forgive her, but he still deserves to know.
It was gratifying to see Rose deliver some straight up honesty to her, but now I'm waiting to see if Bella can absorb it and hopefully act on it.
You write riveting characters that I want to know more about. I'm definitely looking forward to your next chapter.
| dazzleglo chapter 20 . 3/13/2012
Ahh but he is going to have kids out there. Good for Rose, Bella did take advantage of her.
| Vivi H88 chapter 20 . 3/13/2012
Please next chapter great chapter :)
Poor Bella !
Please next one fast!
Can't wait till the next one
| Nina chapter 20 . 3/13/2012
WOW! That's all I have to say.
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| IThinkINeededThat chapter 20 . 3/13/2012
Wow - talk about a bad day.
First - Rosalie should die. Yes, maybe Bella was dragging her down, but everything she just said was rude to the nth degree. Rosalie is a selfish bitch. Bella deserves more.
I can't blame Edward for feeling like he does - she did use him. But Rosalie was the catalyst and Emmett needs to find out about that. He was used too.
Gah! Bella didn't even want a baby! Not for herself!
Bella needs a new life.
| Hushi Taloa chapter 5 . 3/11/2012
["Mornin' Sunshine," I said to Jasper who stood at the stove flipping the cakes. Alice had pink and blue plastic barrettes in his hair holding the thirty or so little braids she'd made. "Lovin' it," I told him placing his coffee on the counter and pointing to the doo.]
Thank God! At least you let Jasper keep HIS hair, although you had Alice torture it! ;-}
Jasper has been a mensch since childhood, huh? So the girls were abused by Papa Swan, and something must have gone down with Mama Swan, if Alice was always playing Mama to Bella. I love, Love, LOVE your Jasper. With just a few words and a couple of incidents, you have totally sketched out his character. Beautiful.
I identify with Alice's pain. While I still have my girlie parts, they have never worked right. Actually they never worked at all. So, my sweet babboo and I adopted our wonderful babies. I'm sure my experience differed from that the moms who are able to grow their own. It's probably more similar to a dad's experience: really meeting and connecting with your child at birth. With our son, I was his birth mother's labor coach; I cut the cord and was the first to hold him. I felt wonder and amazement and fear - and gratitude to his birth mother. I remember thinking during labor, y'know this infertility thing isn't so bad; she does all the work, and I get the prize! With our daughter, I was again present at her birth, but she came into the via emergency C-section; we almost lost her and her birth mother. I hope your story includes Alice's arrival at a state of acceptance, happiness, and grace.
Thank you so much for writing.
| Hushi Taloa chapter 4 . 3/11/2012
Whiskey. Tango. Foxtrot. Edward shaved his head? You copied that travesty from Rob's real life? Ugh. He has completely lost his beauty, as I perceived it. I can't even look at his pictures anymore *sob*. Okay, so I have a real hair fetish. My sweet babboo had a ponytail and earring and was a musician when we first met, and I've never gotten over it. I just love longish-to-long hair on men. (My sweet babboo became a doctor - where did that come from? - and now has a military haircut and no earring. Bummer. But at least he's still cute and can still play anything with strings.)
So Bella's embarrassment - and, it seems, any other negative emotion - results in her abrupt, rude attitude. She is so full of fear. Anger and unkindness usually come from pain or fear - or that's what my shrink tells me.
She really has to objectify him to be able to justify using him like this. This poor girl is REALLY messed up. And I feel so badly for Edward, too. Together they wrench my heart.
Thank you so for writing!
| Hushi Taloa chapter 3 . 3/11/2012
Okay, so Rose is a little hinky. Or is that kinky? Meh, both probably. "Enjoy your breakup." "Strangely, I will." "This is the longest breakup in history." Methinks the lady doth protest too much. I actually don't see any breakup happening. Both she and Bella are not clear on their personal motives. They are confused women. I'm dying to find out a little history.
Thank you so for writing!
| Hushi Taloa chapter 2 . 3/11/2012
Oh, Gods. Poor Alice. And she's still being brave for Bella, even though they are all grown up now. Alice hurts herself laughing at her own jokes, trying to convince Bella, but maybe also trying to convince herself.
A Nook and a chair, huh? I can go with that. Actually, my computer and a chair. I'm not always able to afford a lot of books, so this Twilight fan fiction site has been a godsend for my budget. Maybe not so much for my Twilight addiction, because it has fed my obsession until it is a 500 pound monkey on my back. But, hey, you've gotta love free. And there are some amazing authors on here - including you, girlfriend!
I'm a little confused about one plot point. In the first chapter, Bella opted for the "crude, natural delivery system" because she wanted to save her nest egg for the baby. But it seems that she actually wants the baby to become Alice's. Is that a flaw in the story, or is Bella just that conflicted about everything? Is she being honest with herself?
Thank you so much for writing!
| Ro Nordmann chapter 19 . 3/10/2012
Love your Angela.
| ginkgo00 chapter 19 . 3/10/2012
Wow, how are you gonna fix this?