|Reviews for UnVeiled|
| sophia chapter 31 . 8/4/2013
the sorting is never in the morning...
| Shadow Huntress chapter 60 . 8/2/2013
I'm probably going to be one of the few reviewers (if not the only one) to respond to this chapter by telling you that, in this chapter, you copied down the most important moment of my life.
I am guessing that Harry, Freddy, and Mina are a set of identical twins and a fraternal baby.
Because the babies fought so much, they had to have a c-section.
You named the girl Philomina, which happens to be my middle name! (Although you spelled it "PhilomIna," instead of the more common "PhilomEna.")
My mom had a set of triplets, two identical twins (girls) and a fraternal one.
The only problem that you had was the difficulty of the combined size of all three babies.
All together, the babies weighed approximately thirteen and a half pounds.
Hermione would not have been able to move!
My sisters and I were all under four pounds.
My smallest sister was under a thousand grams.
My mom has horrible scars on her stomach which are stretch marks.
She had to hold her breath when she bent down to tie her shoes.
I know that you won't change your story, but I thought that you would have liked to hear about a triplet birth from the point of view of a triplet!
My mom says that the Caesarian section was incorrectly named.
Caesar's mother lived, which would have been impossible at the time if she had had a c-section.
In this chapter, Harry reminds me of my dad. My dad sometimes calls us Things 1, 2, and 3.
I also want to point out, the youngest child (born approximately a minute after the second child) is going to resent being the youngest for the rest of his/her life!
Whenever we go by age, even though, as triplets, we are all the same age, as the one pulled out last, I am forced to "wait my turn."
Mina is going to have a tough life.
As identicals, the other two will be referred to as "twins." They also will try to find a way to be different.
They feel special because they are identical, and they will try to keep Mina out of everything that they do.
This should be easy because they are boys and she is a girl.
When they are little, twins don't want an extra fraternal hanging around. I don't know why.
I also don't know if this happens all the time, but it did happen when we were little.
One more thing that you will find interesting comes when they learn how to talk.
Freddy, Harry, and Mina are going to be hard to understand.
They are instinctively going to call something by an incorrect name, just because the others are going to know what they are talking about.
If Hermione and Ron don't work very hard to stop them, their little triplets are going to create a new language.
I really hope that you like my information. I really love your story.
Keep writing and I'll keep reading and reviewing.
| Guest chapter 61 . 7/29/2013
Please post the sequel!
| chronos-girl chapter 44 . 7/28/2013
this is turning out to be a brady bunch kind of story. lol. but i'm liking it. Harry and ginny having children left and right
| FlameOfIllumination chapter 43 . 7/27/2013
I've been thinking for some time now that the basic premise of this story doesn't make sense- if Severus and Sirius have all their own memories then they ARE adults. Small, easily tired, over emotional adults. And acting like because they can't control their magic they are therefore children doesn't work either- otherwise what are you saying about Muggles?
| FlameOfIllumination chapter 32 . 7/27/2013
I really like this story but I hate the way you punished the centaurs. Either slavery is wrong or it isn't- you don't just go 'well its wrong to enslave children but its fine to enslave centaurs.'
| Rawr I'm a Taco chapter 61 . 7/21/2013
Oh, I absolutely love this story! It's amazingly well, written, has a great plot, and not OOC at all, that I can tell. I can't wait for the sequel! Keep up the good work!
| johfra chapter 61 . 7/20/2013
exceptional work loved every word
| TheWolfsMoon1331 chapter 61 . 7/11/2013
I'm so glad there's going to be a sequel :D - I really want to know the worlds reactions to finding out who they really are :) (I really hope it happens :) )
| GreekPrincess143 chapter 34 . 7/7/2013
To answer the question, Severus told the students to open to that page once...multiple times. Gosh, I'm such a Potterhead
| misuky7 chapter 61 . 7/6/2013
This was amazing. I absolutely adore your works. The stories you write are very well written and I just seemed sucked into them after a single chapter. :3
| Sabine8195 chapter 61 . 7/2/2013
I liked this story a lot! Although when is the second one coming out?
| Haruchan-chan chapter 61 . 6/27/2013
I love this story. Totally loved it.
| Harriverse chapter 61 . 6/27/2013
I'd be really glad to find out when you start a sequel to this fic. I really appreciate how you have Severus growing as a person and developing into the person he can be with love and family in his life. It's such a nice change from the acerbic character he is in canon.
Thanks for sharing your work!
| Harriverse chapter 58 . 6/27/2013
This is an incredible story. The characters are so well balanced that they seem real. Things are moving along, especially since you have no canon to follow. The situations are quite inventive. I'm glad that your characters are not falling apart at the seems because of their pasts.