|Reviews for Luxury|
| Saranwyn chapter 1 . 4/4/2013
Best smut scene EVER! I mean, it was hugely long and I didn't get bored. Eh, anyways...I don't want to sound like too much of a perv, but this was good! And very eloquently written. A lot of people trade style for content and a lot of other people on this site actually just don't write that well, yet. This is awesome.
| Alana-kittychan chapter 1 . 4/1/2013
Usagi's bother really needs to let go he's never going to get Misaki
| wordsmithie chapter 1 . 2/15/2013
Whoah, that was hot. Though that's pretty much obvious.
But what I really liked about your story was the characterisation, I guess. Detailing Usagi's annoyance and frustration and letting us see the change come over him as soon as Miyaki comes home. And it's all so in character that it makes me happy.
And even the smut. Especially the smut. A lot of fics just detail the smut, without putting the characters in. If that makes any sense. As in, you could just change the names to any other pairing and it would work just as well because it's ONLY sex.
But here you actually managed to weave in Usagi's feelings about Misaki into the smut scene which makes it more believable, and therefore more enjoyable.
My only problem was sentences like these: "Flipping them over so that Misaki lay rested on top of Usagi, his face dusted with a rosy blush." Not the content ;) Just grammar wise, it seems to be half a sentence. I don't know how to explain it in proper grammatical terms (a little hypocritical of me, then?) but reading it was a little jarring. It didn't feel like a complete sentence, like another bit was needed. It seems to describe the condition of an action, rather than the action itself. Ahh, I'm becoming more muddled. Like, this would make more sense to me: "He flipped them over so that Misaki lay rested on top of Usagi, his face dusted with a rosy blush." Am I making any sense at all? S
Ahh, anyway, I just really did want to thank you for your story. I totally enjoyed it :D (pervert, as Misaki would say). I can't believe you have like 90 favs and only 8 reviews. I suppose maybe cos it's smut...
And, I can't BELIEVE Haruhiko giving that gift to Misaki! O_O hahaha. The nerve of that bastard. But I guess it led to gratifying conclusions for my favorite pairing, so it's ok. K, I'm gone now. Thanks for a lovely story ;)
| EchoSkies chapter 1 . 12/30/2012
Have to admit, I thought there was a little spy camera in the dog so his brother could spy. Or my mind is wandering as I read late at night. Anyways this is amazing! Thank you for your writing!
| SmokedBoo chapter 1 . 7/7/2012
I... I have to releave myself now. That was so hot and so well written. I pictured every thing, and now I'm a hot mess. Feel sorry for my boytoy right.
| zemira chapter 1 . 5/31/2012
Is there any reason this doesn't have more reviews? Because god damn, it really should!
| Sylvana chapter 1 . 4/6/2012
Very nice love how possessive usagi was do more please;)Xxxx
| MoonlightatDusk chapter 1 . 3/1/2012
ooo...that was... o_o Amazing... I like how Usagi came first, and not Misaki, like usual. And the "Touch yourself" part... Love that! :D :D
| damons-hot-as-hell chapter 1 . 2/27/2012
i love it
| Lissy Stage chapter 1 . 2/26/2012
Not only was it hot, hot hot smut, but the ending was sweet. Loved it!
| middaymoon92 chapter 1 . 2/25/2012
Wow. I envy your friend's birthday present, lol. Thanks for the amazing read. This is one of the best fics of these two I've read. No real plot but it was made up for by the amazing details of the smut. I could almost hear Misaki's groans of pleasure. Shows how big of a perv I am. lol. I can't wait to read more from you! _