Reviews for Behind the Walls
sablefalls chapter 1 . 2/28/2012
That is adorable!
TheNaggingCube chapter 1 . 2/28/2012
I was giggling and chuckling right up until the vermin comment of Janeway's. Then Tom's final statement made my monitor a little blurry and a soft awwwww passed my lips.
Juddysbuddy chapter 1 . 2/27/2012
Fantastic! Loved the whole thing. I'm also glad that Tom didn't kill the mouse. I have a feeling it will stay in that cage until it dies a natural death rather than releasing it onto some strange planet. I really liked Tom sharing with the captain that he identified with the "vermin" and telling the mouse he knew she would give him a second chance too. Thank you again for writing!
Cerulean.Phoenix7 chapter 1 . 2/27/2012
I absolutely adore this :D

First of all I have to say this about that adorable little creature: Awwww... Your descriptions reminded me of that tiny little lemur from 'Madagascar' XD Only yellow with a blue tongue, and that is the most adorable thing ever.

Secondly, Tom Paris officially has 'sweetheart' in his description now in my books, and it's staying there. He carried the little thing home in his jacket... that is just so darn cute it's ridiculous!

I also loved the relationship between Janeway and Paris, both written perfectly in their respective roles. I love that there's some awkwardness there because their relationship is not the same as Janeway and Chakotay's; there are a few more walls standing between the two of them. I also loved that you touched on one of the dark pages in Tom's past while they were in the holodeck; that's something that was kind of forgotten in the later seasons, wasn't it?

And I love that this story is all from that line about Jeffries Tube 32 from 'Prey'; I've always noticed that line and I was so excited when I saw in the opening notes that this story was about that.

Also, Janeway's slight phobia of mice was nicely played out, and I like that at the very end when she finally sees the little creature that some of that fear is still there but she sees the same features as Tom... that the little guy is adorable :3

I also have to mention the amusing scene in the ready room; Janeway saying "Cut the crap" to Paris is something I would pay to see! I admit that for a brief time I thought that Tom had actually gone and shot the poor fellow, but I'm so relieved that he didn't and I think that that holds true to Starfleet's principle of 'seeking out new life' as it were :) (And I'm sure Mickey would thank you for such a reprieve).

Overall this is a great fic, and I honestly cannot think of any criticisms for it :) Great job!

Runawaymetaphor chapter 1 . 2/27/2012
" Chakotay had registered his concern at her own haggard appearance practically the second he had clapped eyes on her. "You don't look very rested, Captain,"he had said. "Are you sure you shouldn't let the Doctor have a look at you?" Thanks, Commander.

It really wasn't fair – was it because she was a woman? Was it her translucent Irish skin, or the fact that she was at least a dozen years his senior, that the bags under her eyes resembled the Craters of Loria? Tom looked fresh and cool, apparently totally unaffected by the night's events. No bags, no haggard lines, not a hair out of place … Oh, and his skin was Irish, too, so that obviously wasn't it.

Just as he'd appeared at Auckland when she had first seen him - the thought came unbidden. There, working on shuttle repair detail with a blow torch in one hand and a location monitor around his ankle, registration number carefully concealed under freshly regenerated skin, his only visible concession to his condition had been the sheen of sweat on his tanned face. The contrast to the naked despair she had seen in his face last night in the shadows at Sandrine's could not have been starker. Tom Paris – master of mimicry, able to fool everyone around him into thinking that he was perfectly fine, when he spent nights wrestling his demons …

But whatever it was that allowed him to appear his usual, unflappable self, Kathryn was not immune to some of the baser human instincts. Resentment at the genetic throw of the dice that had turned up aces for the bag-free young pilot was beginning to win out, when Tom suddenly turned his gaze in her direction and … winked? Not only that, but he briefly flashed her his right thumb, before clapping Culhane on the shoulder in farewell and settling into the newly vacated seat at the conn. "

I regret that when you asked me yesterday if I liked this story, my response was a simple, 'yes, I did.'

The truth is that I'm in love with this story, from the first sentence to the last.

It's enviable- genuinely and deeply enviable- how you managed each characters mannerisms exactly. But what strikes me here is how far beyond the glimpses of canon you go, rendering a tale of two people who feel complete enough to be real. Regrets, fears. Weaknesses. And, as with all of us, those thoughts that cross our minds, if never seeing the light of day.

The passage above isn't my only favorite; there were too many to make choosing easy. But give me a wordless J/P moment on the bridge, and I'm your fan for a lifetime. . .
beautyofsorrow chapter 1 . 2/27/2012
So often we gloss over the first season episodes, excusing our neglect with "Oh, they were still figuring things's not worth delving into...let's just get to the good stuff." Whether viewers, readers, writers, or all three in one, it's something I think all of us are guilty of. I certainly am. And then there are lovely pieces such as this one, showing that without the first season and its many foils, reveals, and asked-but-unanswered questions, we wouldn't have the marvelous episodes like those of season 7 (can you tell which is my favorite? ;-).

All that to say, while I am most definitely not a J/P advocate, this piece was great, and certainly canon enough to keep me reading. (I never did and never will give much thought to Tom's choice of captive in "Threshold." Call me inveterate, but I'm P/T all the way...)

Some may call it fluff, but the definition of fluff is much closer to "useless" and "unnecessary to the plot" than it is to my description of this piece. You managed to give the reader many smiles and several laughs (leola root, of course, of course), while also weaving in a number of insights and breath-holding pauses that really made her think. Thank you!
Kath chapter 1 . 2/27/2012
A lovely and moving Janeway and Paris piece! The reader gets to see a different side of the captain in her interaction with Tom, which is both heartwarming and amusing. Great idea to expand on Tom's throwaway line about chasing a mouse. You write these characters so well.
BritMonkey chapter 1 . 2/27/2012
This was just brilliant. Exactly what I needed to read. So light and funny. :)
mabb5 chapter 1 . 2/26/2012
Very, very cute story. Well written. And a well-done characterization excercise. Thanks!
point-blank47 chapter 1 . 2/26/2012
Gorgeous: so in character - even down to the computer :-) - and so many undercurrents. I *was* supposed to be going to bed half-an-hour ago, then I made the mistake of going on to the Voyager page and saw you'd posted a new story, and these days I just haven't got the willpower to go to bed when there's a new AF piece to read!

My favourite line? "I mean, can you imagine - regurgitating leola root four times before finally being done with it?" It's just so Tom! I snorted.
CanonAntithesis chapter 1 . 2/26/2012
That was adorable. Love the vision of Tom mouse hunting through the Jefferies tubes. And, of course, who can resist those little moments when Janeway seemed to be paying too much attention to her young pilot.

Two observations, however:

1. I didn't think Mark Johnson ever attended the Academy.

2. As a sort of auxiliary axiom to the Prime Directive, I wouldn't think it would proper to introduce "Mickey" into an ecosystem alien to him.

Hope you write more J/P mush in the future.
tayababy chapter 1 . 2/26/2012
Totally awesome, and more than a little vindictive on the Captain's part :P
Claire O'Mack chapter 1 . 2/26/2012
What can i say, beautifully written as always i am sure your daughter enjoyed it emensley. i love how you write Tom, you have such wonderful insite to his character, something i can only dream about. i do hope you write more Paris Janeway stuff as you do it so well. thank you for writing XxX
CrlkSeasons chapter 1 . 2/26/2012
I wondered about that mouse and where it might have come from. That's one question, now beautifully answered, that I can cross off my list of Voyager (What the heck?) questions.

Some truly lovely work in this story, with countermelodies woven through the narrative.

I agree that mice are cute. I try my best to encourage them to leave voluntarily.
Kurbits chapter 1 . 2/26/2012
Having grown up on the countryside on a farm I can vouch for how outright cute mice can be and how difficult it is to get rid of them. It's not a fun thing to be the one dealing with the mouse traps. I can definitely relate!

You're fast becoming a closet J/P:er if you ask me, but what ever. ;) I like the way you handle the characters and the story is a good one so if you have more of these, keep them coming!
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