|Reviews for Death And The Vampire|
| Guest chapter 14 . 7/20/2013
I honestly did think it'd be a student, but had no idea who and sadly enough could barely remember who Julius was, aside from the one who's parents didn't come and who was only mentioned in passing (at least to the best of my recollection) great story though, riveting and exciting to the end.
| aileas1 chapter 14 . 11/30/2012
OMG, I wasn't even close! And I'm not too bad about guessing usually :-) I mean I considered just about anyone other than Julius, I even flip-flopped between suspects a few times o_O It never occurred to me that the reason why Edward couldn't find the mental voice of the person thinking Clara deserved to die was that it was a person who effectively only existed during the murder(s) and in their immediate aftermath.
It's pretty cool! You gave us the run-around like a good Golden Age mystery, but without it feeling contrived. We (and Edward!) are lulled into a false sense of security/confidence from Edward being able to get inside people's heads, so we don't question the conclusions from his eavesdropping. He does get a hint that what he's hearing isn't all there is, when he finds Mrs Cade mourning Mrs Tuttle, but he still gets that from inside her head so he doesn't contest anything, and so neither do we! Clever :-) Also, I noticed how just before the ending Edward DOES hear two minds in one body - after a fashion! - when he hears the Sieyes' baby 'broadcasting' from inside his mum. I don't know if this was deliberate foreshadowing or if it just seems like it in hindsight, but I thought it was cool!
I really liked Edward going back and forth over whether the humans were prey or something more than that. It's almost like he's already decided on 'more' in his mind and heart, but his instincts still keep him back from fully admitting that(plus he's stubborn, of course).
I think it was really smooth of you how you had him think at one point that he'd been getting too close to these humans and he resolves not to do this again; I like how that links up to the canon books where he's always so stand-offish. And of course, it's awesome how he doesn't really feel regret that he didn't save Julius, that lays the groundwork for his rogue years hunting down villains for supper.
I just realized I'm sort of leaving a review for the Whole Thing on the last chapter, so I might as well continue in the same way instead of scrambling around to find each relevant chapter! I have to say I powered through the story so fast, I couldn't bear to tear myself from reading it for the five minutes it would take to leave a review each chapter!
Anyway I remembered the Christmas scene too - that was fantastic! I have a weakness for Vampy Cullen Christmasses, probably since I read giselle-lx's The Family Cullen. I think the gifts were perfect, although my favorites were Esme's knitted goods. It's funny they're all agonizing over Esme and thinking she sees humans as prey, and worrying she's not keeping up with her human mannerisms and all, but with her constant instinct for fussing and mothering and caring for people she's a lot closer to the goal of being as human as it's vampirically possible than any of them give her credit for (including herself!). I did think chocolate was an odd color though. For his hair I would have expected green or something!
Overall I just discovered your stories (even the older ones from years ago!) and I was so excited because I thought I'd read everything I would like in the fandom and there was nothing left. So it was great to find out otherwise! I was even more excited to realize you wrote this last story quite recently, because until I did I had thought you had stopped writing a while back. So I'm hoping you might want to write a bit more? I imagine a scant 83 reviews on a story like this with so much work to set everything up just so is probably not much encouragement, but all I can do is promise that this time I WILL review every chapter! I'm not picky what you write; it could be more Carlisle and Holmes (did I ever love those! Especially Chicago - Carlisle on the eve of turning Edward, can't beat that!) or it could be more Edward. Anyway, I will be putting you on author alert so I can be sure to know if you start anything :-) In the meantime, thanks for several days' worth of pretty awesome stories!
| Sweetie7smiled chapter 14 . 10/29/2012
Good story! Quick ending, but nicely done. :) Thanks for writing!
| Sweetie7smiled chapter 8 . 10/29/2012
Good story! Very interesting, and a neat picture of the early Cullen family. Thanks for writing!
| Sweetie7smiled chapter 2 . 10/29/2012
Very interesting, and nicely written. :) Thanks for writing!
| Guest chapter 14 . 8/15/2012
no . i thought it was a parent .
| Noble Korhedron chapter 14 . 8/8/2012
Good story. :-)
| abbyweyr chapter 14 . 7/8/2012
That was a surprise. Didn't see the connection. A bit overreaction to Mrs Clarence slapping the student for that time, not so sure it would be all that unusual under the circumstances. Forgot to mention the Christmas gifts - very fitting. Well told tale and fitting end.
| abbyweyr chapter 12 . 7/8/2012
Finally on the hunt.
| abbyweyr chapter 11 . 7/8/2012
Clara? Miriam? hmm...interesting.
| abbyweyr chapter 10 . 7/8/2012
increasing population of rabbits and gophers - partly from the food he is tossing their way? funny.
| abbyweyr chapter 9 . 7/8/2012
I really thought Edward might go and try to trace the killer. Oh well. Nice realization on his part about not getting the full story just reading what's going through some one's mind.
| abbyweyr chapter 5 . 7/8/2012
oh, poor Esme. poor human in the woods.
| abbyweyr chapter 3 . 7/8/2012
Edward's on the hunt for the murderer. Like the details with the different students personalities and all.
| abbyweyr chapter 2 . 7/8/2012
venturesome students - first wanting to do protection patrols and now finding the killer. Nice last paragraph of Edward finding the students interesting and becoming familiar.