Reviews for Devil Warrior Volume I
mrp00pybutthole chapter 4 . 9/10
Gotta be honest; I'm finding it incredibly grating the number of random Japanese words that just appear throughout: kun, san, nani, hai, buchou, sama, it's all really contrived.
mrp00pybutthole chapter 2 . 9/10
It's... Longinus. Not. Longinuses.
Keiser chapter 7 . 3/25
so you didn't leave issei dead in the forest I honestly thought you did
Gold2King chapter 2 . 1/5
Hm, the prose is still well constructed enough to maintain some suspension of disbelief, though the story elements inserted were, well, not really appropriate, much less accurate.
The Longinus have been confirmed to have been seen and observed several time throughout history, even relatively recently in the novels as heavily implied in the first volume and basically confirmed a few volumes later with the info they had on the Longinus, and them not being observed for 20.000 years is a bit of a stretch, since the most powerful one was created not even 3 thousand years past. The Great War, during which God created the red and white Dragon Longinus, was mere centuries past.
The golden gauntlet, which I will assume is the Gigantis Dragon, was not a part of the original Longinus nor was it even a Sacred Gear, since Azazel bribes the living, breathing dragon with panties to borrow his power. It has also not shown any special properties besides basic stat power boost and giving the wielded a spear weapon. It does not absorb energy. No particular defense is given besides the balance breaker armor, and the base form should simply be a spear, as the name implies. Though it is artificial, so it is difficult to say what the natural state should be WERE it to be sealed, but that in itself is odd because God only took the effort to seal Ddraig and Albion due to their rampage across battlefields. Fad Is reclusive and just collects... 'Treasure'...
The Plot hole of how exactly the Devils or fallen angels has still not been filled. I suspect it might be later, but not in a full or totally logical fashion.
Gold2King chapter 1 . 1/5
It's pretty clear that this is superior to the White Devil emperor whatever it inspired. The prose is better, characters less cringey, has a more solid background, ect. When you see proof that something as dumb as 'it's the same thing but he gets op artifact which makes it 100% legit unique' gets the story twice as much attention as the superior original, it really makes me wonder about the community.
kewllewk chapter 1 . 1/5
You're not even trying to be subtle about the pairing, are you? Whatever, I'm a lot more bothered that random people who aren't actually that high up in the chain of command of their respective factions know minute details about both a secret organization(and an even more secret one backing it that most people in that organization didn't even know about) that no longer exists and Shinji's personal life. I can understand the supernatural knowing about the world pre-Third Impact, and Shinji's status as a pilot was always a bit of an open secret so I can see them knowing what he did, but having everyone know EVERYTHING about the plot of the show is just unrealistic.
BlackRoseFire chapter 16 . 8/27/2016
Awesome story. I really loved the way that you had Shinji get into the DxD world. I can't wait to see the next chapter.
The Devils Bleeding Crown chapter 3 . 2/19/2016
I never get tired of reading this. I think this read through, makes 11 times I've read this, and it never gets old.
Spelling Errors chapter 6 . 1/18/2016
Raynare
Kalawarner
Dohnaseek
Mittelt
Sona
Serafall
Ajuka
Guest chapter 1 . 1/6/2016
An enjoyable chapter, of I may make one succession: don't use 'HHHHHHHHHHH' for your line breaks. I keep on thinking you have written 'AHHHHHHHHH' which has different connotations. Perhaps you could use XXXXXXXXXXXXXXX or OOOOOOOOOOOO instead, as both of these avoid this problem and retain a pleasing symmetry.
1337Pwny chapter 15 . 9/7/2015
another great fic from one of my favorite authors
godzillafan1 chapter 15 . 8/30/2015
okay story I was wondering could you write a crossover with shinji where he ends being transported in the last unicorn while the red bull is chasing the unicorn and schmendrick ends up changing shinji into a unicorn while saving her? there's so very few last unicorn crossover fanfics out there on the net and I think shinji with amalthea/the unicorn would make a very sweet couple please consider it.
WriteShop chapter 1 . 8/5/2015
This is pretty original, actually.

Shinji acts like shinji. No 'God Mode', no insta-harem.

very nice
javalalo chapter 1 . 6/1/2015
I like the story so far, seems full of potential.
It's surprisingly good how you manage to interconect both universes, and I look forward to see how you develope this along with the story.
But what is going to happen to Issei? is he going to be relagete? will he join Rias peerage, or maybe Sona?
Also is Shinji going to recieve a power up? because I don't see any other was he would be worth anything more than a single pawn
The Arsenal 3.0 chapter 16 . 4/14/2015
Really enjoyed this alternate take on High School DxD. It was interesting to see how Shinji affected the storyline and I especially enjoyed the omakes. XD

- Arsenal
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