|Reviews for The Snake Within|
| Dragonjek chapter 8 . 3/19
I apologize, but neither Harry's response to learning about Sirius's death, nor Daphne's response to finding him mourning the loss of his only surviving family (Dursleys, obviously, don't count) were handled very well.
Sirius dies, and Harry's response is to go off and cry about not being normal? Normality or lack thereof doesn't even apply there. Why is Daphne assuming that he's rolling over and giving up instead of, you know, _grieving for his recently murdered godfather_? And then acting like it was inappropriate for him to have done so?
| Phillies2 chapter 26 . 3/18
Harry becomes head boy after never being a prefect, he's like screw the system. I really enjoyed you story even if I did question a lot of things that happened. It was definitely a interesting interoperation of the power he knows not.
| Phillies2 chapter 15 . 3/18
Well at least he told Dumbles about the other Horcuxes, he was starting to be hypocritical by withholding info just like Dumbles does. I can't believe he turned down being captain, his reasons suck too, I mean he is already at the practices, what more would he really do and it's not like Katie wouldn't help picking the players and running the plays she already knew from past years. She could have been his Co-Captain, just because Ron talks Quidditch doesn't mean he was captain material or knows how to run a team. He has only been on the team for 1 yr and his performance was lackluster at best
| Phillies2 chapter 13 . 3/18
I was reading and then 1 DE took out a railroad bridge and I was like "NO! not the Hogwarts Express" The trains destruction bothered me more than the auror deaths. Also, Snape was publicly ousted as a DE, theres no way the public would let him be a teacher again even if Dumbles got him out of jail
| Phillies2 chapter 10 . 3/18
I did think his paper article would put targets on everybody he mentioned, so he probably could have did that better. He said the Blacks are Extinct? So he isn't Lord black because of the black blood from Dorea Potter/Black his Grandma. Maybe he was just making a point tho. I hope Hermione is okay
| Phillies2 chapter 8 . 3/18
I feel like the Blacks would have some kind of ward to protect the house from Fiendfire and couldn't Sirius just use the Floo to escape. I do understand why you killed him, but I don't have to like it
| Phillies2 chapter 7 . 3/17
You would think Harry would just go to the Quibbler or at least find out the exact holders of the other shares in the Daily Prophet other than Malfoy. I'm surprised Dumbles hasn't noticed Harry's movements so far too. Did they let him finish his history O.W.L after he left? Also him almost not playing Quidditch because of time when he has 2 free periods because 2 classes aren't happening was bs
| Phillies2 chapter 5 . 3/17
Too bad Harry didn't bring up Sirius to Amelia to ask Snape about Petergrew being alive, also to know that he didn't have a trial. Then the kiss on sight order would be taken away. I do understand that he was just trying to accomplish one thing though
| Pegueng chapter 11 . 3/13
Sorry for showing support so late, story being completed mors than three years ago. But this one's fabulous. Well written, enticing, political and romantic and genuinely awesome. Must read on... / Slaintë
| TheUnholySmirk chapter 14 . 2/24
Hahahahahaha. I just realized what v oldie did when Sirius was killed.
| nyx-p1e chapter 26 . 2/24
Brilliant story, really well written! I very much enjoyed your characterization of Harry, Daphne Neville and Hermione, they flowed and fitted together excellently, giving the reader a broad range of hilarious, solemn and deep moments between them. Thank you for all the effort you put into writing this story and posting it! :)
| DamnedJoker chapter 19 . 2/8
Doesn't it seem that Astoria recovered too quickly?
| DamnedJoker chapter 14 . 2/8
I like the plot but I feel that Harry and Daphne's coming together should have had a little more of a build-up. Good work on the whole.
| DamnedJoker chapter 10 . 2/8
I'll have you know before that I'm a pretty harsh critic and it is my pleasure to say that you're doing very good with this story ( until now ). I hope your writing never loses its sheen.
| fadewind chapter 9 . 1/31
Get on board or get left behind Albus! I am really getting into your story.