Reviews for The Snake Within
WhiteElfElder chapter 26 . 2/7
That was a quick ending after such lengthy chapters. At least Albus goes out with the truth.
WhiteElfElder chapter 25 . 2/7
Neville tried to make a funny and it fell flat.
WhiteElfElder chapter 22 . 2/7
Personally, I would park the Vanishing cabinet in a corridor that only allows movement forward, fill that corridor with Darkness Powder, and have the other end be a disillusioned Veil of Death. Heck, stick the cabinet to a ceiling with it pointing down towards the arch laying below it waiting to receive.
WhiteElfElder chapter 11 . 2/4
Where is Dobby during all of this?
WhiteElfElder chapter 10 . 2/4
Why not launch an investigation against Fudge and find out what he has stashed away by misappropriation of funds?
WhiteElfElder chapter 8 . 2/4
Were all the books lost in the fire? What about the horcrux that was housed there, or had that been stolen by the thief? Was Kreacher the one to sell out the order, or did he also die in the fire?
WhiteElfElder chapter 6 . 2/4
They can't use Harry's admittance to the Tri-Wizard as proof that Ministry declared Harry of age?
seldombites chapter 26 . 1/10
This was an excellent story. I really enjoyed it.
InfernoItaliano chapter 8 . 1/8
are you fucking serious? Harry has just learned his godfather is dead and all Daphne can say is 'Fuck you, grow a pair'? Harry doesn't even respond to that like he should, you know? 'my godfather just died asshole'. No, instead all he says is 'I just want to be normal.
InfernoItaliano chapter 7 . 1/8
Daphne appears to be perfect. Harry doesn't even defend keeping a Sirius a secret for some reason. Harry was thinking that it would be best to keep him a secret because he's controversial, yet when confronted by Daphne, all he has to say is 'I don't know' and bring up Fudge's incompetence as a reason? That's a direct contrast from Harry's thoughts earlier, and seems to me completely ridiculous to have expectations of 'knowing everything' about someone.
the-cari-moose chapter 26 . 1/8
There were a few inconsistencies throughout and the grammar was off in every other sentence, but it was a nicely contructed story and I liked your plot.
the-cari-moose chapter 25 . 1/8
But if Narcissa burnt down Malfoy manor with fiendfyre, that means that most likely all the horcruxes are destroyed anyway right? Except for Harry?
the-cari-moose chapter 9 . 1/6
What’s the fudge? The Chief Warlock of the Wizengamot is Dumbledore!
the-cari-moose chapter 8 . 1/6
Really? C’mon, did Sirius have to die? And wasn’t Remus staying with him at that point too? Why isn’t he dead? Also you had the twins leave Hogwarts still even though the Umbridge situation was solved, why didn’t they finish their seventh year if they weren’t being threatened with torture?
ChaosDeath chapter 4 . 12/21/2017
man every fanfic always got hermoine in it is there any good ones without her being associated with?
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