A unique read. If it were to continue beyond a one shot, you could probably make it more interesting by blurring the line between Naruto's strange self-love and reality. Maybe have Naruko not dispel like she should at some point?

Whenever I stumble across your channel I always find myself drawn to this story. It's beautiful in its humanity and tragedy. I can easily understand how Naruto's background could lead to something like this. In fact. I believe it's only for the necessity of canon's plot that he didn't end up psychologically compromised. The clone relationship (familial or otherwise) trope has been done before but never as succinctly as your portrayal. You know you made a good one-shot when you leave people begging for more. As much as I wish for more I feel the story is fine where it ended. It arrived and said what it wanted to say and left. Nothing wasted and with no excess. It seems like you have left fanfiction which is perfectly reasonable but I hope you still read your reviews letting you know your work is still being appreciated years latter. Thank you, and I wish you the best.

jesus this is too good

Can i kill sakura ?

You do realize Naruto never claim Sakura has his right? That is fanon thing that has to stop.

This story would've made for a great series. You should've made him go Kyuubi on them though. I'd imagine seeing his "girlfriend" constantly get attacked would anger him like no other.

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Wow... dude... wow

Such a epic one shot. I love it. It's really a good character study (a tad bit weird) but so well written that I understood the pain and struggle Naruto felt.

Definitely end it here. Maybe Change the end a bit but I don't think a sequel will have the same quality. And that's definitely multiple personality disorder. Now that I think about it, naruto is actually the perfect candidate for it.

nice story

fuck...

You know i really wish that you would truly finish this

Dang. This brought a whole new perspective to things and darkened many others than before. I find it so intriguing yet so sad and bitter that I can't help but be left feeling a bit out of sorts and wondering. Wondering how Naruto didn't turn out this way, why was nothing done before it went so far, and why do others care now when they didn't care before? Other things I wonder about but theyre jumbled and I can't fathom some of them enough to ask properly.
One thing I will say for sure is that this has brought more abhorrence and want of pain for Sakura. How dare she think she has any right to "set Naruto straight" and think herself high and mighty for it. Especially when she did so in public and with no patience or finesse for the delicate matter since it concerned Naruto's mind and his very life. Of course, she probably didn't know or see it for what it truly was, but that doesn't change the fact she did such a thing out of selfishness and her dislike of Naruto.
I know I'm being biased and bashing and probably harsh, but I can't help it. I mean, correct me if I'm wrong about anything, by all means, since I do have an account on here but am not able to login.
Nevertheless, this is a piece I don't think I'll be forgetting anytime soon. Thank you for writing and sharing this.
Take care and have fun.

A good Idea, and nicely executed, if for the fact that it feels really unfinished. A sequel wouldn't be out of order. :)

The potential of clones in angst-fics is, I feel, insufficiently appreciated. Thanks for helping close the gap.